Talk:Mountain nyala/GA1

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Reviewer: Gug01 (talk · contribs) 23:17, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply


Will review. Might not really get to it until next week.

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Lead

Monotypic species? Please clarify. Gug01 (talk) 23:20, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Done.
The following from paragraph 2: The mountain nyala are shy and elusive by nature. These animals form highly cohesive herds. Four to five individuals may congregate for short intervals of time to form small herds. See below:
If the mountain nyala are shy and elusive, how do they form herds? Gug01 (talk) 23:23, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Clarified.
If the herds are so cohesive, then why do they last for "short intervals of time"? Gug01 (talk) 23:23, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Removed "cohesive", it is a confusing term here and meaning is no clearer even in the source.
The following: half of the world population of the mountain nyala. This implies the mountain nyala is present throughout the world. Gug01 (talk) 23:25, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Fixed.

Taxonomy & Description

Good job. Gug01 (talk) 23:29, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Behavior & Ecology

Fixed
  • See this: These animals form highly cohesive herds. Four to five individuals may congregate for short intervals of time to form small herds. However, groups containing as many as 100 individuals have been reported from the Bale Zone, composed of several family units moving in and out periodically. Again, same problem mentioned in lead. Gug01 (talk) 23:32, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
I have addressed the issues above.
  • Males are not territorial, and have home ranges covering 15–20 km2 (5.8–7.7 sq mi) in the wet season. If they are not territorial, then how do they have territories? Clarification needed. Gug01 (talk) 23:35, 23 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Home ranges are not synonymous to territories. The animal visits the home range regularly, while territories are areas which it not only visits but guards as well. This "guarding" behavior is lacking in this species.
I see. Thank you for the clarification. Gug01 (talk) 23:00, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Added.
  • See following: Males are not territorial. Males have home ranges covering 15–20 km2 (5.8–7.7 sq mi) in the wet season. The repetition of males sounds very clunky. Gug01 (talk) 23:00, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
I spoiled it when I edited it last. Fixed now. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 13:27, 25 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Habitat & Distribution

Done.

Threats & Conservation

Thanks!
I am following the IUCN source mentioned in the article. I don't think it is outdated. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 04:20, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
I check for myself and it turns up as endangered. It's probably one of the things in debate, but since it's currently endangered, please don't do any changes. Gug01 (talk) 23:09, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Relation to Humans

Removed except for a mention about hunting. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 04:20, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking on this review and appreciating my work at places. I have replied to all comments, let me know if there are any more issues. 04:20, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

The whole article is good work. "Good work" is simply an unnecessary filler I used for sections with no problems. Gug01 (talk) 23:00, 24 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Gug01: I guess there are no more issues now. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 13:27, 25 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
Yeah, you are right. I was just really busy and didn't get around to it. Gug01 (talk) 23:25, 29 January 2016 (UTC)Reply