Talk:Mountaineer (train)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Mackensen in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Ypnypn (talk · contribs) 23:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll try to complete the review within the next two hours. -- YPNYPN 23:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

Basic review
  1. "The father of the Mountaineer" - the father?
    Re-worded. Mackensen (talk) 00:16, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  2. "need to carry 150–300 people daily" - are you sure that's in the source given?
    Updated reference--pointed to the wrong article in the newspaper. Mackensen (talk) 00:05, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  3. "record winter" - in what way was it a record?
    One source called it that; apparently it was pretty bad for the period. Changed to "harsh." Mackensen (talk) 00:16, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  4. "but lose its sleeper" - should be wikilinked for those of us don't know what a sleeper is.
    Linked; it was linked in the equipment section too. Mackensen (talk) 00:16, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  5. "one of the coaches was a dome" - same issue; what's a dome?
    Linked. Mackensen (talk) 00:16, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
  6. The trains split apart in the middle of the journey; why?
    The Riley's endpoint was Newport News; the Mountaineer served Norfolk. I changed "beyond" to "points east," if that helps. Mackensen (talk) 00:16, 7 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

YPNYPN 23:32, 6 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

Formal review
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    I fixed two grammatical errors. The main issue here is the lead; per WP:CITELEAD it's unnecessary to provide sources for facts sourced in the body. Technically it's not wrong, but it's not necessary. Also in the lead, I'm not sure the last sentence is that important that it belongs there.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    The sources are provided and acceptable.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    A brief Internet search finds that there isn't much said on the topic, so its conciseness is not a problem.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    No POV issues to worry about.
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
    The very short history reveals no edit wars.
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    I guess there are no free- or fair- use images available. A shame.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail: