Talk:Mrs. California

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

Will review this one soon. Ruby 2010/2013 18:27, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• You use "episode" too much in the first lead paragraph; change it up
• ""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses and was ranked the fifth best episode of the season, so far. " Seems like sloppy writing (from...from), and you should indicate who ranked it the 5th best episode
• Wikilink bench-press
• ""Mrs California" features a guest appearance from Maura Tierney who is set to play Robert California's wife, Susan California.[4]" "Is set" is past tense; she already guest starred
• I prefer to split the production section into 3 paragraphs for ease of reading (writing, guest stars, and web clips)
• Reviews: ""Mrs. California" received a range of reviews from critics from positive to mixed responses." Sloppy writing again
• "Despite this he complimented the cold open" Why "despite this"? (Note I haven't seen the episode). You could actually delete this sentence, as you already mention multiple reviewers liked the cold open
• IMDb is not a reliable source
• Ref 16: Unitalicise TV by the Numbers, Hollywood.com,
• Italicise New York and TV Guide
• It's The Hollywood Reporter
• Any cultural refs?

Address above comments and respond here when you have finished. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 22:21, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues. In addition, I added a completely new section about Cultural References. You might check that out!--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:32, 7 January 2012 (UTC)

To maintain consistency with other Office episodes, you can just have one solid production section (Above, I only meant make three separate paragraphs, not sub-sections). Otherwise the article looks good. Pass for GA. Nice work, Ruby 2010/2013 03:21, 7 January 2012 (UTC)

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