Talk:My Delirium/GA2

GA Reassessment

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Reassessor: Till I Go Home

Lead

• Lead is inappropriate, there is insufficient text and does not fully address main aspects of the topic.
• 'Musician' - perhaps change it to 'singer'?
• "The third track on Ladyhawke's eponymous debut album" - do you mean third single?
• "sold over 70,000 copies in Australia" - first you should discuss the chart performance, then sales/certifications.
• "peaked at number 9 on the New Zealand Music Charts" - '9' is unacceptable, it should be a word not number. 'New Zealand Music Charts'; this is unclear. What music chart; album chart? Singles chart?

Background and writing

• Looks good

Composition

• The article needs a composition section.

Critical reception

• "In its review, Allmusic said the song..." - surely someone with a name reviewed it, Allmusic itself did not.

Music video

• "The music video for "My Delirium" was directed by Benji Davies and Jim Field, known as Frater." - who is known as Frater, Benji or Field?
• When was the video directed, and where was it directed?
• Red links which need either fixing or removing.

Use in the media is a bunch of unsourced trivia, remove it.

Charts

• Per typical certifications tables, this is unacceptable. See this for a good quality example.

Track listing

• Which release version was this? UK? New Zealand? Not specified.

References

• Ref 22 is dead.
• Refs 27 and 28 are bare, fix them. A link to the site is not enough, they need the title, publisher and access date.

Overall

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• It's been seven days and there still has been no major improvement to the article. Sorry but that's a delist. The article can be re-nominated at any time but these issues should be addressed. Till I Go Home (talk) 01:02, 12 February 2012 (UTC)