Talk:Namri Songtsen

Latest comment: 1 year ago by AA73 in topic Tengri Khan

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Just a few comments on improving the article. It's a good start.

  • It needs more than one reference. I may have something laying around, but I don't know if I'll have time to add anything.
  • Needs a thorough copyedit and rewrite for style issues. I suggest taking it over to the League of Copyeditors and seeing what they can do for you.
  • The sentences are generally very long and should be broken up into clauses or shorter sentences. For example:
    • Expanding his rule to all of modern Central Tibet, including the Lhasa region allowed him to rule over many groups, and to begin the establishment of a centralized and strong state, with skilled troops who gained experience in their many battles in the early 7th century.
might become
  • As he extended his rule to all of Central Tibet, he began to establish a strong, centralized state with the help of skilled troops, who had gained experience in the battles of the early seventh century. Or something. I don't really know.--Gimme danger (talk) 17:20, 28 April 2008 (UTC)Reply

Tengri Khan

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Can you please write sources about Tengri Khan and him being his son? AA73 (talk) 21:28, 8 December 2022 (UTC)Reply