Talk:Nana's Party/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

• Grabbing this for a review; I will have my comments up in a couple days if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• Provide a subtitle for the image in the infobox.
  • Sure, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Insert “the” before “hidden character”.
  • Good spot. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Can you introduce Alan Ayckbourn and Mike Leigh? I was not familiar with each of these two men before reading the article so a brief descriptive term/title before the person's name would be helpful. I am probably not familiar with these names as I am an American, but I feel that is always important to absolutely clear.
  • No problem. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• I would suggest you do the same for Abigail’s Party (such as clarifying that is a play).
  • Done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Writing

• Make sure to include an alt. for both images (the Reece Shearsmith and Lorraine Ashbourne images).
  • I'm never sure what to put in these, so I've just gone for the actors' names. Is that right? (I've also added one for the episode poster.) Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• The phrase ”was upped” sounds a little too informal so I would suggest using something stronger.
  • Yes, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Clarify that Absent Friends is a play.
  • Done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Casting and characters

• Add a descriptive phrase in front of Life is Sweet and Benidorm for a reader unfamiliar with either topic.
  • Good idea, done. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Filming and direction

• I understand the meaning behind “basically as-was”, but it sounds a little awkward and I think there is a stronger way of phrasing this.
  • That's fair- I've gone for "Scenes in a bedroom used the room mostly as the production team found it." How's that? Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Otherwise, great work with the “Production” section overall.
  • Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Plot

• Great job with this section!
  • Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Analysis

• The sentence construction with the Chris Bennion’s quote is slightly awkward and also the meaning of “this” is not obvious so clarify this point.
  • Yes, I see. I've rejigged it slightly; hopefully it is now clearer. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Remove the “do” in between “than” and “Jim and Angela”.
  • Sure. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
• Otherwise, great work.
  • Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Reception

Great work; I have nothing to suggest here.

• • Thanks! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

Final comments

• @J Milburn: I am very impressed with the work put into this article; I only have a few minor suggestions to offer in my review. Once you address my comments, this should be a quick and easy pass. Aoba47 (talk) 20:15, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
  • Thanks so much for taking the time to have a look at the article, your kind comments, and your very good suggestions. I have, I hope, dealt with everything. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:26, 30 May 2016 (UTC)
    • Thank you for your quick responses to my comments. You have done awesome work with this page. ✓ Pass Aoba47 (talk) 21:55, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: