Talk:Natasha Falle/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by 1ST7 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: 1ST7 (talk · contribs) 22:28, 28 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

I will review this article. Initial comments should be posted soon. --1ST7 (talk) 22:28, 28 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

Here's the review:
  1. Well-written
  • Paragraph two of "Early life" says that "Men began abusing Falle's mother and made the house unsafe". Can you please specify who these men were (friends, relatives, boyfriends, etc.)?
  • There seems to be a contradiction about how long Falle was married to her pimp. Under the section titled "Abuse", it says she married him at the age of 17 and that they were married for seven years. Under "Effects and aftermath", it says she left him at the age of 27, meaning that they would have been married for around 10 years.
  1. Verifiable with no original research:  
  2. Broad in its coverage:  
  3. Neutral:  
  4. Stable:  
  5. Illustrated, if possible, by images:  
All in all, this is a really great article, and you've done an excellent job on it. It should be ready for promotion to GA status as soon as these two things are addressed. --1ST7 (talk) 21:56, 29 September 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for taking on this review! I have rephrased the statement about the abuse of Falle's mother to clarify that the men were boyfriends. I have also removed the statement that Falle's marriage lasted 7 years; I rechecked the sources and I don't see that statement there. Please let me know if you have any other recommendations for improving the article. Neelix (talk) 03:09, 30 September 2013 (UTC)Reply
The article looks good to go, so I'm going to pass it. Congratulations, and thanks for your work on it! --1ST7 (talk) 03:20, 30 September 2013 (UTC)Reply