Talk:National Reconciliation (Sudan)

Latest comment: 1 year ago by FuzzyMagma in topic clarification

clarification

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Hi @MicrobiologyMarcus it will help if you can indicate what you think need [further explanation] FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:36, 24 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

@FuzzyMagma: I'm in the process of reviewing the article. In general, I'm focused on it's prose, clarity of language, and verifiable inline citations. In my opinion, the language in the lead is unclear and leads to confusion. Specifically for this tag, agreement as to what? Why was there need for agreement? These sentences would be okay later on in the article provided context, but as the opening line in the entry, this causes reader confusion. microbiologyMarcus (petri dish) 20:40, 24 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
I think the opening of the article should simply be

Following the 1976 Sudanese coup attempt, a national reconciliation (Arabic: المصالحة الوطنية) was reached on 7 July 1977, where Nimeiri and al-Mahdi signed an agreement that readmitted the opposition in exchange for the dissolution of the National Front.

and the background should be left to the background section of the article. microbiologyMarcus (petri dish) 20:42, 24 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
make sense, amended the lead FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:46, 24 October 2023 (UTC)Reply