Talk:Neighbours 30th Anniversary/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Therealscorp1an in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Adamstom.97 (talk · contribs) 00:39, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
Hello, I am planning to review this article for GA over the coming days. - adamstom97 (talk) 00:39, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you very much! - Therealscorp1an (talk) 03:46, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
- Apologies for the delay, some things have gotten in the way of me getting to this but it is still on my radar to do soon. - adamstom97 (talk) 07:17, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
- Of course, all good. No rush. Take your take. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 07:55, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
- Okay, I have listed several issues below which I think need to be addressed before I can pass this review. - adamstom97 (talk) 22:44, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
- Of course, all good. No rush. Take your take. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 07:55, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
- Apologies for the delay, some things have gotten in the way of me getting to this but it is still on my radar to do soon. - adamstom97 (talk) 07:17, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
Issues
editI think the lead is generally okay but it does seem to be a bit big and a bit too plot focused, perhaps just a small copyedit is needed to make it a bit more balanced?DoneI'm not sure "celebrity guested" (used twice in the article) is grammatically correct, and even if it is I don't think casual readers are going to understand what it is trying to say.DoneMOS:TVPLOT discourages including actor names in plot summaries, and I think it is especially unnecessary when the next section is a cast list.DoneIt would be good to have references in the cast section (most if not all should be covered by sources already in the article).DoneThe Development section has a few passages that are just re-explaining the plot. You should be able to cut these down and just refer to the key plot details that the reader should already know from the Plot section.DoneI think the first paragraph of the Promotion and broadcast section could do with some dates (at least the months), for context of when the promotion was happening.DoneIt would also be good to bundle together all of those sources for the second Promotion and broadcast paragraph (WP:REFBUNDLE).DoneThe whole article relies a bit too much on direct quotes, can you please go through and do some paraphrasing to cut down on these? Especially try to get WP:EARWIG down to having no possible copyright violations if you can.DoneA quick check of references looks decent to me but I would expect a Good Article to have web references archived.DoneArticle is stable and images are all good.Done
Comments
edit- Thank you for all the advice! Sadly I won't be able to get to this within the next few days, but I will do it soon. As for adding the actors' names in the Storylines section, I just did that because it is how other articles like this do it. So should I still remove them as per your advice or keep them to keep the articles consistent with one another? Thanks again. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 05:06, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
- If all of the Neighbours articles do it then I won't make it a requirement for this review for consistency, but I would suggest the names be removed from any plot sections for the series at some point. - adamstom97 (talk) 11:11, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
- @Adamstom.07: Hi, there. I was wondering if we could put this GA off just for a couple more weeks? Something pretty important has come up in real life and I won’t be able to make any of the major edits that this article requires for a while. Thank you. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 22:07, 21 August 2023 (UTC)
- Apologies, I myself have been busy in real life. I am leaning towards failing the review as it has been so long now but if you expect to complete it in the near future then we can continue. - adamstom97 (talk) 02:22, 10 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Adamstom.97: I completely understand, but please don't fail it just yet. It will have my full attention next weekend. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 06:39, 10 September 2023 (UTC)
- Apologies, I myself have been busy in real life. I am leaning towards failing the review as it has been so long now but if you expect to complete it in the near future then we can continue. - adamstom97 (talk) 02:22, 10 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Adamstom.97: Additionally, with the cast section, other Neighbours and soap opera articles don't normally cite references for each cast member since they are detiled throughout the rest of the article. - Therealscorp1an (talk) 22:50, 15 September 2023 (UTC)
- I know it is probably tricky at times to cite the cast of a soap and so the episode's credits would presumably be used to support the cast list by default. I am okay with the same being done here, just thought it would make sense to use the citations that are already in the article. - adamstom97 (talk) 21:09, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Adamstom.97: Quickly skimming the article, would you say that it's reliance on quotes has been cut down enough or is it too quote-heavy still would you say? - Therealscorp1an (talk) 00:15, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
- Yes I am happy with the improvements that have been made. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:55, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Alright, then I think everything is done! - Therealscorp1an (talk) 02:15, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks for sticking with this and getting it over the line. Changes look good to me, good job! Pass - adamstom97 (talk) 03:02, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you so much! Sorry it has taken so long! - Therealscorp1an (talk) 03:12, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Thanks for sticking with this and getting it over the line. Changes look good to me, good job! Pass - adamstom97 (talk) 03:02, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Alright, then I think everything is done! - Therealscorp1an (talk) 02:15, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- Yes I am happy with the improvements that have been made. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:55, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Adamstom.97: Quickly skimming the article, would you say that it's reliance on quotes has been cut down enough or is it too quote-heavy still would you say? - Therealscorp1an (talk) 00:15, 23 September 2023 (UTC)