Talk:Night of Champions (2008)/GA1

GA Review

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My first GA review, but the article looks good from my skimming. Genius101^Guestbook 00:08, 21 December 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Congratulations, and sorry for being so picky! Genius101^Guestbook 00:17, 1 January 2009 (UTC)

Issues:

• "The predominant match was also..." Reword. Predominant also can mean "main"
  • Done.
• Third paragraph of lead: Should all of that not be in the Reception section?
  • Its in the section.
    • I mean not in the lead?
      • See SummerSlam (2003) and No Way Out (2004).
        • OK
• "the 2007 event's ratings of 5 and 7.5 out of 10": Why did the previous year's event have two ratings?
  • There were two event writers, see the source.
    • Should that not be said there? (or rather in the reception section)
      • Do you have a suggestion?
        • "...out of 10 (there were two ratings because two different writers reviewed the show)."
          • Done.
• "for a title shot..." Explain what a title shot is.
  • Done.
• "he could not wait much longer until WrestleMania". Correct grammar.
  • I think I got it.
• "the WWE title". Use proper name
  • The proper name is "WWE title".
    • I guess that will do, but I was thinking of WWE Championship.
• "That same event". Any way to make it flow better?
  • Suggestion?
    • That same night?
      • Done.
• "Following the events of No Way Out". 1) Should change "events' as No Way Out is referred to as an event several times. 2) Explain why Cena felt cheated earlier in the paragraph (I am assuming because Orton purposely disqualified himself)
  • Done.
• "he would join the WWE title match, making it a standard match involving three wrestlers at WrestleMania". Move WrestleMania to right after the WWE title match.
  • Done.
• "retain the title after pinning". Needs a comma.
  • Done.
• "At Backlash, Cena and Triple H challenged..." Fix, as Cena and Triple H would have challenged Orton on Raw.
  • What?
    • The actual challenge would have been issued on Raw.
      • I somewhat wrote it the info. in the Backlash sentence.
• "wrestlers switched programs". Replace programs with brands.
  • "program" has a better wording, see Judgment Day (2005).
    • All right.
• "if Batista won the tag team match". Wasn't it Batista's team that had to win?
  • His team needed to win in order for him to "secure" his title shot.
    • But it should say that it was his team that needed to win. You can't technically win a tag-team match by yourself.
      • Done.
• In the same paragraph, it mentions Batista's match against the Great Khali as being necessary to finalize the title shot, and then says that he retained the shot. Which is it?
  • He retained his shot because he defeated Khali.
  • It seems a bit confusing to me but it's all right,
• "That same episode". That same night, perhaps?
  • Done.
• "The main feud on the ECW brand was between ECW Champion Kane (Glen Jacobs) defending the title against The Big Show (Paul Wight) and Mark Henry". Fix grammar.
  • Done.
• "determining the championships for each brand." Unclear at first glance.
  • What do you mean?
    • Never mind; I was tired when I was writing the review and I had to reread it.
• "The match began with Finlay". In the ring?
  • Yes.
    • Should it say that?
      • Yes.
        • Then why doesn't it?
          • Done, jeez. ;)
• "Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison controlled majority of the match." Redundant.
  • How is it redundant? I see no problem with it, as the Miz and Morrison controlled most of the match.
    • What about "Throughout the match, the Miz and Morrison were in control."
      • Done.
• "make the cover". Per WP:JARGON
  • Done.
• "push Hornswoggle off the top ropes and slammed him". Fix tenses.
  • Think I got it.
    • Perhaps: "..gain consciousness. He then..."
      • Done.
        • Not quite: Fix the tenses: Morrison the regained consciousness."
          • Okay, done.
• "Emergency medical technician". Uncapitalize.
  • Nope, see Over the Edge (1999).
    • I would have to believe that that was because it started a sentence, but I'll not push the issue.
• "grab and lift Henry by the throat and slam him down". Should link to double chokeslam.
  • Done.
• "That did not last long as the Big Show and Kane...". Just seems unencyclopedic to me.
  • Removed.
• "Tag Team champion". Capitalize.
  • No need.
    • I think there is; for example, WWE Champion, not WWE champion.
      • No need; If this was the case, then you missed Mark Henry as "ECW champion".
        • You're right, I just checked the MOS. Sorry!
• "performed a jump inside kick, a move Kingston calls Trouble in Paradise, covered Jericho to become..." Fix grammar and WP:JARGON
  • Done.
• "charged towards Edge and hit a big boot" Big boot is WP:JARGON
  • Fixed.
• "he hit Batista with the World title". Make it clear that he hit him with the physical belt.
  • Done.
• "countered and able to perform a spinebuster". Fix grammar.
  • Done.
• "Though, on the June 30 episode of Raw, Edge lost". Improve the flow.
  • Think I got it.
• "Michelle McCool became the first ever WWE Divas Champion ". How is this aftermath of Night of Champions?
  • The match was supposed to happen at Night of Champions, but was taken out of the card. Also, it happens to involve a title.
    • Okay you might want to mention that.
      • Seems trivial.
        • Then why is it mentioned in the aftermath?
          • Basically the pay-per-view only involved titles matches. Michelle McCool became the first WWE Divas Champion, thus having somewhat of a significance to have.
• "by the label, Sony Music Entertainment." Remove comma.
  • Done.

References look good.

I got your queries. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 00:11, 22 December 2008 (UTC)

Just so you know, I'll extend the on hold period for a few days, because everyone is busy around Christmas. Thanks, Genius101^Guestbook 18:51, 25 December 2008 (UTC)

Have responded. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 01:06, 29 December 2008 (UTC)