Talk:Now That You Got It/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

Full review coming soon. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:41, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

Lead

Flawless. Just put the year of "The Sweet Escape Tour" between brackets.  Done

Background and release

• "Swizz Beatz and he said he was working with Stefani as well" - re-write sentence. For example: "...and he said to be working with Stefani as well"

 Done

• "Two remixes were included on the CD single, both featuring Marley. The "remix" version is a more reggae-infused rendition, while the "hybrid" version features the song's original beat mixed with the remix version." - What do you mean with "hybrid"? Does it have the same instrumental as the single, different lyrics? Be precise.

 Done

Composition and lyrics

• "The original version". How about the single version?

 Done

• I see no reference to the "reggae fusion" genre.

 Done

• Any digital sheet music?

• Much like the case with Asking 4 It, there is no readily available sheet music on Sony ATV's website, or any other reliable source for that matter

Ok then.  Done

• I was thinking about adding a sample, however, I'm unsure since it's maximum length would be, "0:15". What do you think?

• I agree that it would be rather short if included. Carbrera (talk) 21:56, 3 May 2016 (UTC)

You could include anyway. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:48, 4 May 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "and Sal Cinquemani of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious"." → and Sal Cinquemani, while reviewing the album, of Slant Magazine called it "instantly contagious".

 Done

• "Alex Miller of the NME, however"→ Before "Alex" needs a linking word that helps discern the "favorable" reviews from the "critics" one.

 Done

• "John Murphy of musicOMH was mixed" → I know what you mean, but you can't write it like this. It seems the reviewer is mixed, just like mixed nuts! "John Murphy of musicOMH gave the single a mixed review, writing". No need for "that".

 Done

• "making songs which are all strident and sleek and modern and shiny and brassy and tough on the outside, but which have a delicate core in the middle which is pure and vulnerable and nervous and a little timid" → use your own words.

 Done

Commercial performance

• moderate success on the charts. In the United States, it was commercially unsuccessful..." → Needs an "however, nevertheless...". moderate success on the charts. Nevertheless, in the United States..."

 Done

• "her lowest-selling solo single" → How do you know? I don't see sales references.

 Done

• "In Australasia, the single performed very moderately..." → Full stop after moderately. It debuted at...

 Done

Music video

• "part of The Sweet Escape Tour" → as part of The Sweet Escape Tour

 Done

• "Many parts of the video were shot in a studio." → any example

 Done

• " The video premiered on MTV's Total Request Live on September 4, 2007." → reference?

 Done

Storyline

• "The chorus begins and Stefani, Harajuku Girls and Marley and playing board games under a shelter near the lake side." → "As the chorus begins Stefani, the Harajuku Girls and Marley are playing board games under a shelter near the lake side."

 Done

• "The video concludes with Harajuku Girls and the boys on the roof, Stefani and the girls singing on the scooters." → Doesn't flow well the part "on the roof, Stefani and the girls".

 Done

• Everything else is fine, but how about some sources to back up such description?

I don't see any description on the website you provided.  Not done

• I haven't found any sources to back up the description minus the official music video, so I have added that for now. Carbrera (talk) 21:30, 18 May 2016 (UTC)

The official video is just fine. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:20, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Live performances

• "Stefani's first performance of the track was on the UK's television show Ant & Dec on September 29, 2007. She performed the original version of the song, but ended with a reggae mix". → other source that is not YouTube. The channel that uploaded that must have violated copyright issues.

 Done

• Any reviews regarding that performance?

"several critics appreciating the energy of the performance." → I see one critic.  Not done  Done

Track listings

• References? I see none.

 Done

Credits and personnel

• I would link mastering, keyboards, mixing and so on. Only once each one of them.

 Done

Charts

• Just fine.

 Done

Release history

• You have a "scope="row"" in Europe, delete it.

 Done

• Find another source that is not Discogs. Not reliable.

 Done I removed it

References

• Some references have publisher and work, others only have work. Choose one of the options.

 Done

• Reference 23 is dead. Replace it and archive it.

 Done

End of GA Review:

• Once more a great article, straight to the point with minor fixes in a couple of places. I will put it on hold while you address the concerns. Any doubts or other suggestions just tell me. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:30, 26 April 2016 (UTC)

• I have been extremely busy and although I expect to comply to your suggestions shortly, it may take longer than seven days. I hope you understand, thanks. Carbrera (talk) 01:43, 27 April 2016 (UTC)
• @MarioSoulTruthFan: May I request another week to review these suggestions? I apologize for any inconvenience. Carbrera (talk) 00:59, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

• @Carbrera: It's fine by me. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 09:13, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

• @MarioSoulTruthFan: I have changed the article accordingly. Please take a look at the article when you can. Thank you! Carbrera (talk) 22:58, 3 May 2016 (UTC)

• @Carbrera: I have checked what you did. I left some comments. You missed one issue at the "Background and release" section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:59, 4 May 2016 (UTC)

• @MarioSoulTruthFan: Finished the final touches! Thanks again. Carbrera (talk) 21:34, 18 May 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera: Gladly passing. Good luck on your GA cup. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:27, 19 May 2016 (UTC)