Talk:Obras Son Amores/GA2
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:29, 28 July 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewing an older one since this has been in the queue for over two months --K. Peake 11:29, 28 July 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- Cover art needs alt text
- Remove the venue parameter from the infobox as that is for live recordings
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Are you sure there isn't any sourced recording date(s) since the body does mention about collaborations for five years?
- Did not find any. Javier Espinoza (talk) 20:03, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Pop rock is not properly sourced as a genre since the AllMusic sidebar is not reliable; source a genre in the body and then add it to here
- Replace hlists with bullet points
- Target Spanish to Spanish Language
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Add the singles in here
- "is a studio album" → "is the third studio album"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "Antonio Carmona, released on March 31, 2017 by" → "Antonio Carmona. It was released on March 31, 2017, through"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "on songs to be included on the album." → "on songs for the album."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe name less artists since that reads like a supermarket list?
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "the featured artists on the record." → "the artists he collaborated with."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "Upon its release, Obras Son Amores received favorable" → "Obras Son Amores received favorable"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "with a critic praising Carmona for" → "one of whom praised Carmona over"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "and another naming" → "while another named"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "The album debuted at number three in" → "It debuted at number three on"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Remove Grammy mention since that is only the Latin show
- That is the main reason for writing this article, his Album of the Year nomination, I think it is important. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- You are right actually, pardon my mistake; I have done some copy editing of this statement though. --K. Peake 17:02, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
- That is the main reason for writing this article, his Album of the Year nomination, I think it is important. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "To promote the album, three singles were released, "Mencanta", "Dale Luz" and "Camamasi"." → "For promotion, the singles "Mencanta", "Dale Luz" and "Camamasi" were released in 2017."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:24, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
Background and recording
edit- "singer-songwriter Antonio Carmona released two studio albums," → "Carmona released his first two studio albums,"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "Carmona spent five years" → "Carmona spent five years up to 2017"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "on the songs to be included" → "for the songs to be included"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe translate isn't working for me, but that quote doesn't appear in English on Google Chrome?
- I do not understand this one. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- The translate feature of Chrome popped up for that website, though did not display the quote in the same English as is written in this article; is this my translator's fault? --K. Peake 17:02, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
- Yes, must be your translator. Javier Espinoza (talk) 20:19, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- The translate feature of Chrome popped up for that website, though did not display the quote in the same English as is written in this article; is this my translator's fault? --K. Peake 17:02, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
- I do not understand this one. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "The album received the title Obras Son Amores, inspired" → "He decided to title the album Obras Son Amores, being inspired"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink refrain to itself
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "The album is produced by Carmona and" → "The album was produced by Carmona alongside"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:32, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
Repertoire
edit- Retitle to Music and lyrics
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "Carmona co-wrote all the songs, with..." this sentence belongs at the end of the previous section instead
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "written by himself." → "written solely by him."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- ""Dale Luz", features singer-songwriter" → ""Dale Luz" features singer-songwriter"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "Carmona calls "a magician", saying" → "Carmona called "a magician", saying,"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "is an alchemist sorcerer"." → "is an alchemist sorcerer."" per MOS:QWQ on full sentences, but some of the translations seem to be coming through slightly reworded for me; it says "is an alchemist warlock" on my version of the page, I don't know what is going on but I will assume WP:GOODFAITH though could you comment please to clarify?
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "and co-written by" → "which was co-written by"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "as he recalls:" → "as Antonio Carmona recalled:"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "written with Venezuelan artist" → "that was written with Venezuelan singer-songwriter"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- [3] should solely be evoked at the end of the first paragraph since it is the sole ref for that para
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "and Claudia Brant with whom the singer worked" → "and Claudia Brant, whom the singer worked with"*"composed with Colombian singer Juanes the track "La Razón de Mi Existir"." → "composed "La Razón de Mi Existir" with Colombian singer Juanes."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- ""He [Juanes] sent" → "Of the collaboration, Carmona stated: "He [Juanes] sent"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Remove wikilink on choir as it is too obvious a term
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "more with me," Carmona stated." → "more with me."" in the new order
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "features Alex Cuba writing and playing guitar." → "features writing and guitar from singer-songwriter Alex Cuba."
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "from Carmona's parents relationship" → "from Carmona's parents' relationship"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "is written with Nicaraguan performer" → "was written by him with Nicaraguan performer"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- Remove wikilink on Caribbean
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "The lyrics for the last track," → "The lyrics of the closing track,"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- "allude to ill people, living" → "allude to ill people living"
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
- [3] should solely be evoked at the end of the second para since it is the sole ref of it
- Fixed. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
Reception
editCritical reception
edit- "Upon its release, Obras Son Amores received favorable" → "Obras Son Amores was met with positive"
- Target music critics to Music journalism
- Vavel should not be italicised
- "Juan Habichuela on the album," → "Habichuela on the album"
- Are you sure you can't add more comments from the review?
- "stated that this was" → "stated that it was"
- "that Antonio [Carmona] has" → "that Antonio has" since he is the only Antonio mentioned in the article so it is obviously a quote about him
- El Corte Inglés should not be italicised
- "named the album "a gift" → "named the album a "gift"
- "A prolonged silence marked by his father's illness." is mentioned before this in the actual review; incorporate something relevant to this in the section
- "the 18th Annual Latin Grammy Awards which it lost" → "the 18th Annual Latin Grammy Awards, ultimately losing to"
- Add release year of the album in brackets
- "artists Rubén Blades with" → "artists Rubén Blades and"
Commercial reception
edit- Retitle to Commercial performance
- "At the week of Abril 21, 2017, the album" → "For the week of Abril 21, 2017, Obras Son Amores"
- "at number three in the" → "at number three on the"
- "chart in" → "chart for"
- Add release years of the albums in brackets
- "by English performer Ed Sheeran," → "by English performer Ed Sheeran at number two and one, respectively."
- "and was the highest debut of the week" → "However, it was the highest debut of the week." with the rest of the sentence removed as that is highly off topic
- Maybe move the refs about; only if needed
- "The track "Mencanta", which features" → ""Mencanta", which features"
- Wikilink lead single to itself
- "as the second and third singles," → "as the second and third singles from Obras Son Amores,"
- Mention the release dates for the second and third singles
- I do not have the exact dates. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:26, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Did they chart? If so, add in the positions here and if not, it seems confusing with the singles in Commercial performance; we will have further discussion for what to do if I discover via you that they did not chart.
- An early draft of this article included chart positions for the singles but the source was not reliable. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:26, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- The section titled Reception should be changed to Release and reception; I have done some copy editing to start this for you but it now needs the release date to be added by you as the first sentence with a reliable source. --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- The only reference I found is the one in the first sentence. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:41, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- The section titled Reception should be changed to Release and reception; I have done some copy editing to start this for you but it now needs the release date to be added by you as the first sentence with a reliable source. --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- An early draft of this article included chart positions for the singles but the source was not reliable. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:26, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
Track listing
edit- Are you sure "Credits adapted from..." shouldn't be at the top instead?
- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
- A. Carmona → Carmona on tracks 6 onwards
- Why are no producers mentioned here?
- Daniel Garcia Diego and Carmona produced the whole album, it would be repetitive, or if you want to me add it, I will. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:31, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Can't you write at the top something like "All tracks produced by..."? --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Daniel Garcia Diego and Carmona produced the whole album, it would be repetitive, or if you want to me add it, I will. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:31, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
Charts
edit- Add this section even if the table is only citing the Spain position
References
edit- Copyvio score looks smooth at 3.8%!
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- I do not know how to use the tool. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:43, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Click on revision history, then select the fix dead links option. --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you, the search resulted in 0 dead links. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:40, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Jaespinoza No, you are supposed to tick the box for archiving all non-dead references. --K. Peake 05:18, 5 August 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you, the search resulted in 0 dead links. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:40, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Click on revision history, then select the fix dead links option. --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- I do not know how to use the tool. Javier Espinoza (talk) 19:43, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Remove All Media Network from ref 1 and cite AllMusic as publisher instead
- Cite EFE as publisher instead for ref 2
- Ditto for Vavel on ref 5
- Wikilink El Corte Inglés on ref 6 and cite as publisher instead
- Remove the publisher from ref 7
- Remove target on Billboard for ref 8 and remove the publisher
- Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 9 and cite Productores de Música de España as the publisher instead, plus see the recently-passed GA "What About Us" to cite the PDF better
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold but I feel happy for having reviewed this for you after it was pending in the nominations for so long! --K. Peake 16:58, 28 July 2020 (UTC)
- Javier Espinoza Thanks for replying but I have a couple of statements for you. --K. Peake 17:02, 1 August 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Thank you for your review, please let me know what else I need to fix. Javier Espinoza (talk) 20:29, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Jaespinoza Much thanks, I suggest that you write out the genres in prose in the Music and lyrics section, no longer keeping the ref in the infobox and have made more suggestions above. --K. Peake 20:55, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Fixed. Keep me posted. Javier Espinoza (talk) 21:47, 4 August 2020 (UTC)
- Jaespinoza ✓ Pass time has come for this article after some copy editing from me once I gave it a read through, props for bringing such a short article to GA status! --K. Peake 05:51, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Thank you so much. Javier Espinoza (talk) 18:15, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
- Jaespinoza It is my pleasure, must feel great for you since it is the second nomination! --K. Peake 20:07, 6 August 2020 (UTC)