Talk:Oh Land (album)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:26, 3 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

Lead and infobox
  • For this part (and was evidently signed to the label in 2009), what do you mean by “evidently”?
Done – I switched out the word to "eventually"; I think I initially meant this anyway. Carbrera (talk) 09:06, 12 February 2018 (UTC).Reply
Background
  • Please link Oh Land on the first instance that you mention her.
Done
  • For this part (which was self-produced and administered by Fake Diamond Records.), I am not sure what “administered” means in this context. Could you clarify or use a different word?
Done
  • For this part (Oh Land released Fauna, her debut album which was self-produced and administered by Fake Diamond Records.), I would move the phrase “her debut album” in front of the album title.
Done
  • I am not certain if this part (, which lasted until 2009) is necessary.
Done
Composition and lyrics
  • Link the genres in the first sentence.
Done
  • I am not certain about this part (, where she "defies doctor's orders" by continuing to pursue her dreams). Something about the quote makes the information sounds a little too sensational if that makes any sense. I would suggest paraphrasing to better keep with Wikipedia’s overall tone.
Reworded
  • For this part ( Single "Sun of a Gun" uses a metaphor), I find the opening part “Single” a little awkward, and would remove it as it breaks the flow of the section.
Done
  • For this part (The style of the track is similar to the work of Marina and the Diamonds, according to BBC Music's Fraser McAlpine.), I would just say ( BBC Music's Fraser McAlpine wrote that the track’s style was similar to the work of Marina and the Diamonds) to avoid the rather awkward sentence construction of its current iteration.
Done
Promotion
  • I would move the image to the left to avoid having her look away from the page.
Done
  • I would include the location in the image caption.
Done
  • For this part (Other videos displayed Oh Land recreating), I am not sure that “recreating” is the correct word for this context.
Done
  • Do you really need a link for “trash cans”?
Done
  • Vevo is linked more than once. The same comment applies for Billboard
Done
Critical reception
  • Unlink Billboard
Done
  • Slant Magazine should be in italics.
Done
Final comments
Verdict
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