Talk:Old-fashioned doughnut/GA1

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 00:46, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Add a 's' after 'doughnut' in 'is a variety of cake doughnut...'

• I think it is more gramattically-correct to leave it as is. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:55, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Remove the source; you do not need to cite sources in the lead if mentioned in the article

•  Done North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:35, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Again, remove any sources that are included in the lead

•  Done North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:35, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

• Add a hyphen in 'old fashioned' since that is the name of the article

•  Done diff). North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:21, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Preparation

• Remove the '/or' in 'such as baking powder and/or baking soda,'

•  Done. Changed all to "or" (diff). North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 17:48, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Commercial preparation

• Are the mixes solely manufactured in the United States? If not, I'd recommend mentioning other countries or replacing 'United States' with 'worldwide'

• It's likely that general doughnut mixes are manufactured in other countries, but I'm unable to locate information about old-fashioned doughnut mixes as such. Most sources report about U.S. related aspects. Even searches for the generic "doughnut mix" are not providing much information. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:40, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

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• The last sentence discussing doughnut makers could be expanded, possibly listing other doughnuts made with the aforementioned makers

• This article is about the Old-fashioned doughnut, though, rather than Doughnut maker's in general (presently red-linked). There's not much information available about doughnut makers relative to the preparation of this specific style of doughnut. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:45, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

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Nutritional information

• This section doesn't seem very important to me; considering there are so many variations of these donuts, is it really necessary to include this information? Since it probably should be included, I'd recommend finding another source to back up the facts you listed

• Many food- and drink-related article include nutrition information, and its content is verified by a reliable book source. Reliable sources for comprehensive nutritional information about foods can be quite difficult to find (see source search examples below). I feel that this section enhances the article, whereas its omission would reduce the article's quality. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:48, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

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Variations

• The statement you mentioned is pretty good, but this section as a whole could be significantly expanded. And it should be significantly expanded

• There's not a great deal of information available about custom old-fashioned doughnuts or old-fashioned doughnut variations, but I managed to find a few sources that are usable as reliable. I have expanded the section: (diff, diff, diff). North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:03, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

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References

• [4] - Includes the same author twice
• Other than that (^), the references in the article are pretty solid

•  Fixed Two of the authors have the same last name. Clarified this in the article (diff). North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:14, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

Categories

• You could add several categories to this article, including "Convenience foods", "Snack foods", "American cuisine", "American desserts", "World cuisine", etc.

• Rather than adding these to the article, I have added some of them to the Category:Doughnuts page (diff, diff). North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:17, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

This article needs some expansion before passing GA status. I'm putting on hold until the nominator can significantly lengthen the article. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 01:05, 6 March 2016 (UTC).

• The article has been expanded. Note that there is not a great deal of extensive coverage about this topic, and that I created and expanded the article based upon source coverage available in online sources. North America¹⁰⁰⁰ 18:58, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

I agree. Thanks for responding so swiftly. Carbrera (talk) 19:52, 7 March 2016 (UTC)