Talk:Oliver Bjorkstrand/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )

3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Might be worth including the IPA pronunciation of his surname (pronunciation guide can be found here
Delink "Danish" per MOS:OVERLINK Done

First three paragraphs should be under a level 3 subhead called "Junior" Done
Link the first instances of "goals", "assists", and "points" Done
Remove "2012" in "By December 2012", as we know it should be sometime around there based on the prior sentence and the Top Prospects Game Done
Link first instance of hat trick Done
Period after "with Seth Jones" creates a sentence fragment after Done
Link entry-level contract Done
Hat trick is sometimes hyphenated, sometimes not Done
"50-goal seasons since Dennis Holland in the 1987-88 and 1988-89." → "50-goal season since Dennis Holland from 1987-89" for close para/WP:LIMITED Done
" a unanimous selection to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team and was voted by his teammates as the Winterhawks’ Most Valuable Player." → "unanimously selected to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team, while his teammates voted him the Winterhawks' Most Valuable Player." (active voice, fix close para) Done

"Blue Jackets American" → "Blue Jackets' American" Done
Link Lake Erie Monsters Done
Link 2016 Calder Cup playoffs in the first paragraph ("first Calder Cup playoff appearance") and delink in the second ("Calder Cup Finals") Done
Comma after "won the Calder Cup for the Monsters" Done
"of making the Blue Jackets' 2016-17 opening night roster" Done
Spaces around the ellipses in the Kekalainen quote, per MOS:ELLIPSIS Done
Link AHL All-Star Classic Done
Link trading deadline Done
Comma after "player Roman Polak" Done
Comma after "teammate Artemi Panarin" Done
Hyphen to en dash for "2018-19 season" and link appropriately Done
""a guy that you can count on in every situation."" → ""a guy that you can count on in every situation"." per MOS:LQ Done
The sentence about his three career playoff game-winning goals needs some explanation; we jump from CBJ making the playoffs to that, and I'm not sure what team these GWGs are against
Link alternate captain Done

The link to the Denmark junior team should be in the second sentence, not the third Done
Mention that he also made a senior appearance in 2015 Done

[2] (Rob Mixer) is missing "National Hockey League" in the publisher parameter Done
[4] (Columbus Alive), [33] (Columbus Dispatch), and [45] (Toronto Star) should be the work param, not publisher Done
Per MOS:ALLCAPS, [7] (Central Scouting), [15] (WHL championship series), [43] (Denmark sweeps), and [47] (Olympic dreams) should be in title case, not all caps Done
[39] is different from the rest of the NHL press releases -- it has CBJ as the work and no publisher Done

That's what I've got! Putting on hold for now, feel free to ping me with Q's. — Ghost River 19:26, 23 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

GhostRiver, so sorry to add to your workload but I seem to have missed the 2020–21 season because of the confusing dates. I am currently expanding it and it will need a review. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:00, 28 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Made a couple of small aesthetic changes on my own, and now I think it looks ready to pass! — Ghost River 17:50, 6 November 2021 (UTC)Reply