Talk:Oman at the 2016 Summer Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:13, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Taking review MWright96 (talk) 08:13, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lede

• Think Oman and the 2016 Summer Olympics and flag bearer can be wikilinked
  •  Comment: I had removed the ones from Oman and 2016 Summer Olympics per MOS:BOLDLINK / MOS:TITLEABSENTBOLD like your previous review at Laos at the 2012 Summer Olympics. I wikilinked flagbearer. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:07, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Fair :) MWright96 (talk) 20:03, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• Opening cermeony can be wikilinked to 2016 Summer Olympics opening ceremony
  • Done --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:07, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Overall, both Al-Harthi and Al-Balushi had the highest placing for Oman with their 26th place finish." - which specific events?
  • Clairifed --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:07, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Athletics (track & field)

• Wikilink men's 100 metres to Athletics at the 2016 Summer Olympics – Men's 100 metres
  • Done --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:30, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• women's 100 metres should be linked to Athletics at the 2016 Summer Olympics – Women's 100 metres
  • Done --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:30, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "qualifying time for the women's 100 metres.[24][18]" - refs in numerical order please
  •  Comment: Flipped. Does it make sense even though the citations supports the sentence out of order? If you need me to flip the sentence too, let me know. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:30, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
    • It makes sense regardless of whether the citations are out of order or not MWright96 (talk) 20:03, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "As Al-Alawi did not finish in the top two of her individual heat, Al-Alawi did not advance with her eighth place finish" - repetition of "Al-Alawi"
  • Nice catch! Reworded --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:30, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Al-Alawi did not advance with her eighth place finish." - clarification please
  •  Comment: Would "did not advance to the next round" work? The next sentence says she did not advance past the heats. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:30, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
    • That will work MWright96 (talk) 20:03, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Shooting

• Think the term quota place can be wikilinked to Olympic quota allocation system only on the first mention
  • Didn't know about that wikilink! Added. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:39, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Al-Balushi made 381 points and reached her score requirement" - how about acculumated or scored instead?
  • Went with accumulated as I used scored with Al-Khatri --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:39, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "With his points" - points total or points score
  • Good point :P Went with points total --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:39, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Al-Balushi scored 379 points during qualification at the 10m air pistol event." - think competition can be used instead of the word in bold for variety
  • Went with Olympic competition --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 17:39, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Tables

• Both tables should be MOS:DTT compliant and fully referenced
  • Did. Also renamed headers for athletics/updated Al-Harthi --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:58, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

References

• Works/agencies/publishers should ideally be wikilinked on the first mention only
  •  Comment: If you're referring to citations 1, 18 and 23, they were already there when I started expanding. I can delink them if it's a better solution. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
    • By all means MWright96 (talk) 20:03, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• Newspapers titles such as Oman Daily Observer and The Times of Man should be in the works field
  • Same issue as above. Though I fixed these instances per cite news template. Also tweaked the IAAF one per cite web template. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• Reference 13 "Ready, Aim, Run" is missing the page number
  • Ahhh. I did miss it. Added to The Road to Rio |at parameter. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• The same reference should mention it came from Issuu
  • Done --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• Reference 23 "Oman delegation gear up for Rio Olympics" is missing Times News Agency as the agency
  • Nice catch! Added --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
• The fully-capitalised surnames in References 34, 35 can be done with only the inital letter in a capital letter
  • Did. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Shall put the review to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 11:40, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

@MWright96: Did most of your list. However, I have some questions I tagged with comments. Also, I renamed the headers for the athletics table and clarified that Al-Harthi didnt race in the prelimenary round to prevent confusion. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:07, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

@MWright96: Okay. Let me know if anything else needs to be done, especially with the athletics table and clarification of Al-Harthi not competing in prelimenary. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:00, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

@MrLinkinPark333: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 21:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)