Talk:Once Upon a Time in Hollywood/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Rusted AutoParts in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:54, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Basic Stuff

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References

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  • Archive all archivable sources. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 13:59, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    • Current progress:
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@Rusted AutoParts: You have until November 14 to complete this final improvement or I will have to fail this article completely. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 20:04, 7 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Some Dude From North Carolina: Sorry for the late response. I just want to clarify that the archiving is the last remaining step needing taking. I’ve been not as involved here as it seemed @Samurai Kung fu Cowboy: was spearheading this. Rusted AutoParts 06:02, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Rusted AutoParts: To answer your question, yes, archiving is the last step. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 13:17, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Some Dude From North Carolina: All archivable sources have been archived. Rusted AutoParts 21:35, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Rusted AutoParts: According to the WayBack Machine, references 107-116 can all be archived as well. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 21:45, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
They would've archived when i ran the bot through. Rusted AutoParts 22:06, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Rusted AutoParts: Well, you should check the WayBack Machine. To prove my point, here's a saved archive for ref 108 that can be found at the WayBack Machine. I guess the bot didn't pick these up because they are mostly from the same website. But whatever the case might be, references 107-116, 118, and 206 are all archivable. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 22:12, 9 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
Per this discussion it seems references 107-116 can't be accessed for some reason in the edit field. Rusted AutoParts 23:48, 10 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Rusted AutoParts: I see the issue with 107-116 and 118. The only one left is 206 which is in fact archivable. Archive that and this article is passed! Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 00:14, 11 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Some Dude From North Carolina:   Done Rusted AutoParts 02:30, 11 November 2020 (UTC)Reply
Ref 99 has been fixed and reformatted.
Completely removed Gremlins reference which was 192 when I removed it. It was a link to a page that doesn't exist. There is another reference there, so if it ever existed it would have been excessive anyways.

Other basic stuff

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Space added
Reference has been reformatted

Plot

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  Done Rusted AutoParts 14:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Plot is now 700 words.
Later, Plot is now 691 words.

Cast

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Removed Burton from cast list for now
Does this reference help? Yoninah (talk) 21:16, 20 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
That reference did help. Thank you. Corey Burton has been re added with reference.

Character background

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The two references have been swaped.
"In the film" has been added
Comma added
References added to the end of the above sentence
  • References are needed at the end of the following sentences:
  • "...and Zack Whyel also play members of the Manson Family."
Deleted sentence. Cannot find valid reference.
  • "Madisen Beaty, who portrays Krenwinkel, previously portrayed her on Aquarius."
Reference added to the end of "Aquarius" sentence.
  • "Spahn Ranch was recreated in detail over about a three-month period."
Citation added to Spahn Ranch sentence. Reference already existed.
  • "...and Adam West appear via archive footage and sound."
Deleted sentence for now. Could not find valid reference to cover everyone mentioned.
  • "This happens in the film, with Sebring in place of Altobelli and Hatami."
Added reference at the end of "Altobelli and Hatami" sentence.

Production

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Writing and development

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Changed "In 2009" to "About 10 years ago."
Stunt double sentence changed per suggestion.
Reworked sentence
Created Future section and moved Bounty Law info

Casting

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  • The following sentences need reworking:
  • "When Butler auditioned, he did not know which character it was for."
Reworked sentence
  • "She said the process was unlike any other except maybe auditioning for drama school..."
Reworked sentence. Changed to direct quote.
Space added
  • "Willis auditioned for two roles, neither of which she got, then was offered the part of Joanna Pettet." (change "then" to "but was later")
Changed
Sentence merged

Filming and design

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  • References are needed for the following sentences:
  • "Movie poster artist Steven Chorney created the poster for the film, as a reference to The Mod Squad."
Added citation to poster sentence. Reference already existed.
  • "He also created the posters for Nebraska Jim, Operation Dyn-O-Mite, Uccidimi Subito Ringo Disse il Gringo, Hell-Fire Texas, and Comanche Uprising, which was reprinted for Dalton's home parking spot."
Added citation for Nebraska Jim sentence. Same reference as sentence above
  • "Mad magazine caricaturist Tom Richmond created the covers of Mad and TV Guide featuring Dalton's Jake Cahill."
Added citation to Mad magazine sentence. Reference already existed.
  • "The exterior of the Van Nuys drive-in scene was filmed at the Paramount Theater since the Van Nuys Theater no longer exists."
Reference added to end of drive-in sentence
Brackets added
Brackets added to second it
Added "Drive-in". Also to Van Nuys for consistency.

Music

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Track listing chart fully created and filled out. Still missing a few track lengths.
All track lengths completed
Professional ratings section added with reference.

Release

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Sentences combined
The comma has been removed.

Reception

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  • Remove the entire "Top-ten lists" section per MOS:FILM, which reads: "Do not add critics' top-ten lists on which a film appears, except on a case-by-case basis subject to consensus." Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 15:34, 19 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
The entire "Top-ten lists" section has been removed
Changed to 554

Future

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Sentences merged
Started to expand. Added info about release of four hour cut.
Added sentences to Bounty Law paragraph.
  • Change the first sentence to:
  • "On August 5, 2019, it was reported that a 4-hour cut of the film would be coming to Netflix. On January 3, 2020, Collider confirmed the statement in an interview with director Quentin Tarantino, revealing that the extended-cut of Once Upon a Time in Hollywood would be available in approximately one year."
Changed to the above but left “may” and “probably” as per the sources. It didn’t read as anything official.
Space added.
Changed Western TV sentence.
Reworked sentence. Split into two sentences.
Changed above sentence per corrections.
I didn't leave it on purpose. It was an easy miss. There were other corrections you had in the first two, so I didn't notice it. This was not the third time you asked for this on its own. It wasn't being ignored. Someone fixed it now. It no longer has the apostrophe.
Comma added

Other

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Connections to other Tarantino films

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Bruce added

Historical accuracy

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Linked
  • A reference is needed for the following sentence: "In the film, it is Kasabian who drives off, deserting others."
Reference added
Changed it to "Stuntman Cliff Booth." It seems that if it doesn't identify Booth as a stuntman, the connection isn't as clear to me. I can change it to the note if you disagree.

Bruce Lee

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Removed period

Images

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Caption in release and Casting have been edited
Added "the main stars of the film" to caption
historical accuracy image caption has been expanded to tie it in.
The Lee caption has been edited

GA (Overall) Review

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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