Talk:One (Casualty)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:One (Casualty)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 12:47, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:47, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

@Some Dude From North Carolina: Thanks for the speedy review. I shall respond to the comments ASAP. Soaper1234 - talk 19:16, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

@Some Dude From North Carolina: I believe I have responded to all your comments. Let me know if I need to do anything further. Soaper1234 - talk 13:24, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Is there a secondary source that can be used for the runtime?

• I've had a look and cannot find one. Soaper1234 - talk 19:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Remove the comma after "television series Casualty".

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "and the NHS" → "and the National Health Service (NHS)" (to explain to readers what you're talking about)

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "are trained" and "which covers" should be in past tense since this is from 2016/2017.

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "Twitter hashtag".

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Plot

• The plot section is 397 words (without the names) so that passes MOS:TVPLOT.
• On the other hand, are the names of each actor necessary if there's already a #Cast section?

• Removed cast section, so would be needed. Plus, it is first occurrence of names. Soaper1234 - talk 19:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Remove the comma after "passed onto Jacob".

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "walks in the" → "walks into the"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Add a comma after "Duffy, Chloe".

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Shouldn't it be "difference in people's lives" rather than "difference to"?

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 19:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Cast

• Try to be consistent here and in the rest of the article between "sister Lisa" and "Sister Lisa".
• The Instagram image doesn't exist anymore / is dead. Find a replacement or remove the claim.
• Remove the colon after "including".

I've just removed the section as I've realised it isn't that crucial. The guest stars are already listed in the infobox and regular cast are mentioned throughout the article. Let me know if you disagree with this though. Soaper1234 - talk 19:48, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

I was going to comment on whether the section was necessary. Either way, great way to be bold! Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Production

• Since the episode has already aired, certain phrases in this section and in the rest of the article should be in past tense.

• Read through and corrected tenses. Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Casualty → Casualty

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "fly on the wall" → "fly-on-the-wall"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Why are there three paragraphs (2-4) in this section of plot and reviews?

• Paragraph 2 explains the format of the episode, with real-world information supporting it.
• Paragraph 3 is real-world information about the two work experience women. I don't mind removing this paragraph if you don't feel it is needed.
• Paragraph 4 is basically quotes about the episode explaining what the episode is designed to be; how the cast and production team envisioned the episode. Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Remove commas after "to a stage", "Duffy, Chloe", "cast, crew", and "two boom operators".

• There was only a comma after "to a stage". Did you mean add a comma after the other three quotes? Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

@Soaper1234: Yeah, I meant that commas should be added after "Duffy, Chloe", and then after "cast, crew", and after "two boom operators". Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:23, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

 Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:25, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "one of production sound mixer" doesn't sound right

• Fixed Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "support cast" → "support the cast"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "same to regular" → "same as regular"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "there was no cuts" → "there were no cuts"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "equivalent to" → "equivalent of"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "is billed" → "was billed"

Reception

• "highest rated" → "highest-rated"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• The uses of "which is" feel repetitive, and some are not necessary.

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Again, some uses of "is" should be "was" since this already aired.

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• "for crew" → "for the crew"

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 13:22, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

References

• Archive all archivable (either manually or with this tool).

• Completed in this edit before the review began. Soaper1234 - talk 20:01, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• Mark video references from BBC / BBC One with "url-access=registration".

•  Done Soaper1234 - talk 20:01, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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