Talk:Operation Frequent Wind/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Hchc2009 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Hchc2009 (talk message contribs count logs email) 19:11, 31 August 2011 (UTC)Reply

There are some prose issues to deal with early on in this article. I'm not a fan of "quick fails" for articles unless absolutely necessary, so if we can sort these out I'm very keen to carry on the review after that.

The major point here is that the Planning, Preparations on the ground, Options 1 and 2 - fixed-wing evacuation, Task Force 76, Tan Son Nhut under attack, The DAO Compound, The Embassy, Results of the evacuation, Chaos at sea and Casualties sections all need some substantial work on paragraph structures. In all of these, there are numerous one sentence paragraphs (e.g. "At 17:00 the first CH-46 landed at the Embassy.") that really need to be formed into proper paragraphs. While you can have single sentence paragraphs, typically a paragraph will follow a theme or idea through at least two or three sentences. Most of these paragraphs are far too short, and as a result the text becomes very "bullet point" like, if you'll excuse the phrase.

If you could take a stab at brigading the various sentences into paragraphs, I'd be very happy then to work through in detail the remaining points. Cheers! Hchc2009 (talk) 19:11, 31 August 2011 (UTC)Reply

It's all gone quiet, so I'm going to have to fail the article at this review. I'd be happy to rereview at a later point however. Hchc2009 (talk) 06:12, 9 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

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1. Well-written:

(a) the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct;

(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

2. Factually accurate and verifiable:

(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;

(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;

(c) it contains no original research.

Broad in its coverage:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;

(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias.

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Illustrated, if possible, by images:

(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;

(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.