Talk:Orange-billed lorikeet/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 00:52, 5 November 2023 (UTC)

Will review soon. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:52, 5 November 2023 (UTC)

• Range map?
  • This one's too complicated for me to make, will ask another editor.

• Crop taxonbox image to better show the bird? Compare with other articles.
  • Done on Commons, might take a while to update here.

• The species feeds on pollen, nectar, flowers, fruits and uncommonly, seeds. – needs additional comma, and maybe write "and, rarely, seeds".
  • Added commas, kept "uncommonly".

• but are rarely found with species of other genera. – Does this mean there are other species of the same genus that they like to forage with together? If not, why not simply "found with other species"?
  • Yeah, the previous clause says "sometimes forage together with yellow-billed lorikeets at fruiting trees".
    • OK, but why not take my suggestion, which I think is simpler? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:00, 6 November 2023 (UTC)

  Jens Lallensack, done. AryKun (talk) 12:55, 7 November 2023 (UTC)

• The orange-billed lorikeet was originally formally described – What does the "originally" add? Remove
  • Removed.

• As you explain "clade" in a bracket, it would help if you do the same for "clinal", too, as this is even more technical.
  • Added a gloss.

• Maybe the cladogram could be simplified by just using common names for monotypic taxa, and also use the common names for the Neopsittacus species. Especially because you have not provided the scientific name for the other (yellow-billed lorikeet) in the text, so the reader won't know to what species it refers to.
  • Done.

• Relationships of Neopsittacus to related genera based on a genetic study published in 2020. – needs inline citation to that study.
  • Seems I miswrote the year, is actually based on a 2023 study that I have cited now.

• species's range has similar coloration – "species' range" and "a similar coloration"
  • Done.

• including the rhinonyssid mite Mesonyssus alisteri,[13] the philopterid chewing louse Psittaconirmus zinki,[14] the menoponid chewing louse Eomenopon semilunare,[15] and the rhinonyssid mite Tinaminyssus trichoglossi.[16] – Why not combining the two mites? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 01:17, 5 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Combined.

• Jens Lallensack, see replies above. AryKun (talk) 11:00, 5 November 2023 (UTC)
  • Cool; see one reply above. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:00, 6 November 2023 (UTC)

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