Talk:Oranges & Lemons (album)/GA1

Latest comment: 5 years ago by David Fuchs in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: David Fuchs (talk · contribs) 18:58, 25 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

In progress—look for a review up early next week. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 18:58, 25 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

  • General:
    • Overall, article is stable, seems broadly comprehensive.
    • For as long as the article is (~5600 words) I don't think you need a four-paragraph LEAD here. The individual and specific chart performance, especially, seems like way too much detail for the lead.
    • I don't really get the numbering going on in the track listing. Even adding up all the side tracks before the 2015 expanded edition, I'm not sure why the numbers start at 76.
  • Prose:
    • owever, the group still "languished in relative obscurity"[2] amid a growing cult following.—why are we quoting material without attributing it? Does this need to be quoted versus summarized?
    • At the suggestion of A&R executive Jeremy Lascelles—you have not explained what A&R is.
    • Given an initial budget of £150,000 (equivalent to £400,000 in 2018), rehearsals began on 16 May—I assume this is May 1988, but given there's been a whole subsection without mention to years it'd be best to restate down here.
    • Check your MOS:DASH usage—you've got hyphens were you should be using dashes, dashes in other places, double hyphens in others, and it's generally inconsistent.

--Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 13:26, 3 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

@ILIL: Is this going to be worked on? If not I will fail the GAN. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 17:09, 17 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Archiving review due to no work being done to address review. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs talk 16:17, 25 October 2019 (UTC)Reply