Talk:Oregon State Hospital/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:42, 7 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I am taking a look and making some straightforward copyedits as I go. I'll jot questions/issues below:

• The hospital has been featured in popular culture, used as.... - not a fan of this, I'd just let the facts speak for themselves

• ''Oregon State Hospital is located in what is referred to as the Oregon State Hospital Historic District - why do we need the qualifying " what is referred to as"?

• At the first mention of James C. Hawthorne I'd add a descriptor (e.g. "American physician" or whatever)

• Activist Dorothea Dix was an advocate of Hawthorne's original hospital, which she had visited twice, and was a vocal critic of the opening of the new state hospital, - if she supported the first but opposed the second...shouldn't it be a "but" not "and" joining the two clauses. Also, why did she support the first and can we add anything on her views on the second? Controversy is important here.

• Before the introduction of psychoactive drugs in the late-twentieth century,... - is that what the source says? chlorpromazine was introduced in 1952 and its use spread quickly...

• Moises Perez, a paranoid schizophrenic - you'd not say this, but rather "the patient Moises Perez, who had schizophrenia " i.e. use noun for condition not adjective

• ...and treatment for a patient, Moises Perez, age 42, who died there in October 2009 - you don't need to mention his date of death again

• Population and administration section should be in chronological order

Err...@Drown Soda:? You see this? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:19, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

@Casliber: apologies—this got lost in my notification feed. I will review your comments this evening and make the appropriate edits. Was this the whole of the review? Thank you --Drown Soda (talk) 21:19, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Dunno yet - I need to read it again I think, to see what else I might have missed. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:32, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

@Casliber: I have addressed your above comments, and also added updated information about the facility's new superintendent as of Feb. 2018. Let me know if there are other concerns. --Drown Soda (talk) 00:55, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

• Can you address the tag.

• How many beds does it have now? I can't see it in the text...have I missed it?

• Any other details on what it does now? e.g. still doing ECT I presume? And long-stay as well as short-stay wards?

@Casliber: I think I have addressed the above issues; I added a citation for the railroad information; as far as the current bed number, it is sourced at 620 (post-renovation in 2010; see ref. 53). As far as the use of electroconvulsive therapy, it was still practiced at the hospital per a 1988 report, but I cannot find a source that patently states whether or not it's used today. I presume it is as ECT is still used in some situations, but I can't say for sure. --Drown Soda (talk) 00:37, 11 March 2018 (UTC)

1. Well written?:

Prose quality:

Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

References to sources:

Citations to reliable sources, where required: - one bit to fix

No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:

Major aspects: - just checking the current bed issue ok I give up, the website is opaque and there is nothing else about.

Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:

Pass or Fail: - three minor issues, otherwise lookin' Good....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:05, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.