Talk:Ormond Beatty/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:50, 15 March 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I'll be reviewing this article to help reduce the good article nomination backlog and to gain points in the WP:WIKICUP. Although quid pro quo is not required, if you fancy returning the favor, I have a list of articles in need of review here. — GhostRiver 17:50, 15 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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  • "An 1835 graduate of Centre himself,"
  • "with the church" feels vague (and I usually here in the Catholic context of the capital-C Church); would "in religious affairs" work, or is that misleading?
  • In the infobox, you can use the marriage template to add marriage & widower dates to his three wives
  • Shouldn't his MA be in the infobox as well?

Early life and education

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  • Should mention birthdate here with a reference
  • Reference (Family Papers) does not specify that Ormond was the fourth of five children or that he was born in Mason County, although the latter may be inferred
  • "Beatty's father" → "His father"
  • Maybe specify to whom he lost in the 1838 race
  • ""at the last moment and by the merest chance."" → ""at the last moment and by the merest chance"." per MOS:LQ

Career

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  • "After finishing his studies at Yale,"
  • "and became a professor of chemistry and natural philosophy"
  • The sentence about the Civil War is very long and the semicolon can probably be swapped for a period & sentence break
  • Should Board of Trustees be capitalized?
  • Not immediately obvious what the relevance is of the Old Main Building; maybe mention if it was one of his first acts as president
  • Also move order of that sentence around so it's chronological (i.e. built then, then demolished, now Crounse Hall is here)
  • though the board of trustees required him to lecture only one hour per day in an effort to retain him as part of the faculty. I'm thinking this means he wanted to retire but they said "Hey, we'll let you teach one hour a week instead". Am I right in this? If so, it should be clarified

Personal life and death

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References

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  • Good

General comments

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  • Image is public domain and obviously relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Earwig score looks good, everything falls under WP:LIMITED

Putting on hold for now. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 21:50, 16 March 2022 (UTC)Reply