Talk:Osama bin Laden/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 15:40, 3 July 2015 (UTC)

• studied at university - at an university
• link al-Qaeda
• the lead is poor and mediocre. I suggest you to rewrite it
• though I am aware of the Arabic naming system but the current unsourced material is nothing short of original research
• the first line of early life and education needs to be reworded
• specify "soon" and "later" in the next paragraph *"some sources", " one source"
• "they were separated before"?
• " as an adult " - what does it mean?
• was described - by whom?
• with violent jihad - remove violent
• sometimes been called - make this clear
• his formal name is Muhammad Omar not Mullah
• "the only Islamic country" - no need of quotes
• ... as well as from every Islamic country of the world. - Unsourced
• terrorist by scholars - which scholars? And the word terrorist should be in quotes
• heavily anti-Semitic, - remove heavily
• The first para of militant activity is unsourced
• According to Wright, - who is wright?
• evidence of terrorist plots - terrorist is a word to watch
• the affluent Al-Riyadh quarter - remove affluent
• relationship with Mullah Mohammed Omar. - Remove Mullah
• Saudi Arabia is sometimes called "The Land of the Two Holy Mosques" in reference to Mecca and Medina, the two holiest places in Islam.... - It is unsourced and should be in footnotes
• It is believed that the.. - Who believed?
• also "reported" in the next para
• In the 1990s, bin Laden's... - The para is unsourced and needs to be better explained
• ... U.S. Federal Bureau of Investigation placing bin Laden on its Ten Most Wanted list. - Unsourced
• small convoys of recruits - remove small
• severely damaging the latter - remove severely * later broadcast - later broadcasted
• have been disputed - by whom?
• however offer - offered
• Shortly after the September 11 - specify the time
• was the gravest failure. - Remove gravest
• killing dozens - specify the number
• were captured - was
• Whereabouts just prior to his death - the timespans in the para is not clear
• Critics accussed - which
• .. government "baseless speculation". - Unsourced

Rainbow unicorn You have 7 days to address the issues. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 11:27, 30 July 2015 (UTC)

Seven days have passed. Although I'm not actively involved in this GAN I'd be hesitant about seeing it awarded GA status; it relies too heavily on press and other not-so-ideal sources rather than academic and biographical publications devoted to bin Laden. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:10, 10 August 2015 (UTC)