Talk:Pacorus I/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 14:55, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

Happy to review the article.

Review

Lead/infobox

• Link numismatist; Armenian (move present link up); Romans

1 Name

• Link transliteration

2 Biography

• Unlink Turkey (common term);
• Link Pompey if possible using someone listed in Pompey (disambiguation).
• Link Euphrates; numismatist
• Use c. 55 BC in the caption. (not required but it's useful)
• the Roman triumvir Marcus Licinius Crassus is a MOS:SEAOFBLUE, I would move the links apart if possible

How about 'and a [[Roman Republic|Roman]] army, commanded by the [[First Triumvirate|triumvir]], [[Marcus Licinius Crassus]],'? Amitchell125 (talk) 14:51, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Noice, added it. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:02, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

• MOS:'S – needs to be applied throughout the article, e.g. Artavasdes's
• Can Artavasdes be linked with one of the rulers listed in Artavasdes?
• the lone exception – lone is redundant

3 In literature

• reports that Pacorus (whom he refers – amend to 'reported that Pacorus (whom he referred' (as the author is not living)

5 Sources

• Link Michał Marciak
• Bivar – the page range is not needed; link to David Bivar

Added link. Imho the page range should stay - I always use them for chapters of a book. --HistoryofIran (talk) 17:58, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

• Link available for Brosius - https://archive.org/details/ThePersians/page/n3/mode/2up?view=theater
• The sources should be in alphabetical order (see Ellerbrock)
• Katouzian is not cited – it should be added to the Further reading section or deleted
• Marciak needs a location so as to be consistent with the other sources
• Ensure that your ISBN numbers are all written in a consistent way
• A location is needed for Rapp
• A link is available for Syme - https://archive.org/details/romanrevolution0000syme_t1k4/page/n5/mode/2up (registration required).
• Syme has an OCLC number (1035928651) but the 1939 edition is too old to have an ISBN number, so I'm unclear where it came from

Err... idk. I copied it from Parthian Empire. --HistoryofIran (talk) 17:59, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

...which is a 2002 edition, hence the ISBN number. I'll tweak the PE article later. I'll edit your Syme to have the OCLC, please revert if you're not happy. AM

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 12 January to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 19:33, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Passing

Passing now, great stuff. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:50, 4 January 2022 (UTC)