Talk:Paimon (Genshin Impact)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 01:10, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

Hello! This is my first time doing a Good Article review, so this will be fun. Will try to get to this as soon as I can. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 01:10, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

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Six GA Criteria

1. Article is well-written. A few typos and iffy wordings here and there but nothing that makes the article unreadable.

2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.

3. Broad in coverage. Covers multiple aspects of the character in significant depth.

4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.

5. Article appears stable. Any vandalism was minor and dealt with days before the GAR.

6. The article is illustrated with an image of Paimon, and the image is properly sourced. This is just a suggestion and more of a nitpick than anything, but you could potentially provide an example of the "Emergency Food" meme in Reception to illustrate the kind of humor Paimon generated.

Prose Review

Lead

Lead seems fine, and summarizes the key points of the article.

Design and voice

Section seems alright. Voice actors seem to be properly sourced. I have a minor nitpick with the first sentence (Perhaps change it to describe it as akin to a fairy?) but overall seems good. The king of hell bit had me cracking up.

Appearances

-Could you perhaps elaborate by what "speaking for the player" means? Do they just communicate in their stead or are they directly speaking what the player wants to say? I feel this could be potentially confusing for readers.

-What was conveyed about her role as a guide? That sentence confuses me a bit. Perhaps rewrite to something like "Her design, personality, and movements were tailored to make it clear to players that she was a guide/companion." or something like that.

-Referred to as just "social" instead of "social media." Patched that up myself since it's a minor fix.

-Bit about emails is best off being put into a separate sentence.

Promotion and Reception

-I'd change "thoughts" to "sentiments" in the bit discussing Kotaku's thoughts in the second paragraph but that's just a nitpick.

-"However, he wrote Paimon's role at the beginning of the game to be a nuisance that contributed nothing to the game" sentence isn't grammatically correct.

-The bit about E.L.F doesn't seem to contribute much. I'd remove it.

-Sources all seem to be reliable and discuss what they're cited for.

Overall

I have a few nitpicks, but ping me once those are patched up or if you have questions. Since this is my first GAR, let me know if I accidentally messed something up during the review process. I wouldn't want to accidentally mess anything up due to my own inexperience with this. In any case, once everything is addressed I'll be more than happy to pass this article. Placing this on hold for now until issues are addressed.

Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 16:57, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

Hi, thanks for reviewing this and I'm honored to have this be your first GAN review. I've addressed all comments above. λ NegativeMP1 17:33, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

Looks good. I'm happy to pass this article! Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 20:51, 20 March 2024 (UTC)