Talk:Panama Creature/GA1
Latest comment: 13 years ago by J Milburn in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk) 18:36, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article. I'll give it a read through now and add any points I see below. Miyagawa (talk) 18:36, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
- Lead: For some reason I don't think that "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition, and the sloth was buried." flows right. Can I suggest "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition. Once identified, the corpse was buried." ?
- I agree. To avoid short sentences, I've changed it to "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition, which had resulted in hair loss. Once identified, the corpse was buried." Does that work better? J Milburn (talk) 20:01, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks, that works even better. Miyagawa (talk) 10:04, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
- I agree. To avoid short sentences, I've changed it to "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition, which had resulted in hair loss. Once identified, the corpse was buried." Does that work better? J Milburn (talk) 20:01, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
- Lead: For some reason I don't think that "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition, and the sloth was buried." flows right. Can I suggest "The odd appearance had been caused by underwater decomposition. Once identified, the corpse was buried." ?
Actually, after reading the article through three times and trying to find further issues, I can't find fault with the rest of the article. Very nice job, placing it on hold so you can fix the line in the lead. Miyagawa (talk) 19:22, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for your quick review. J Milburn (talk) 20:01, 8 April 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
All looks good, happy to grade this one as a GA. Miyagawa (talk) 10:42, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks very much for your time. J Milburn (talk) 10:49, 9 April 2011 (UTC)