Talk:París Galán

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:43, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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I try to avoid taking GANs of pages I've also reviewed at DYK, but these Bolivian politicians just do not move themselves. It's weird to say this, but they move slower than my TV stations.

The sheer volume of nomination we each submit probably factors in. We have the seventh and ninth most nominations, respectively – on topics that are (admittedly) pretty niche; ha, ha. Krisgabwoosh (talk)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Check the blog reference to see it is only being used for quotes. Also some copy changes. And since this has sat so long, give it a once-over with fresh eyes.

Copy changes

Lead

• Is "Paris, France" necessary? Just "Paris" would suffice.

  Cut "France"; linked "Paris". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

• consolidate a boarder "Broader"?

  Right! Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

Early life

• in La Paz "to get him away from his fag friends." MOS:LOGICAL quote for a sentence fragment. This recurs several times.

  I believe this one is correct as the period is part of the original quote. I have, however, gone through and tweaked some other quotes. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

  @Krisgabwoosh: "If the quotation is a single word or a sentence fragment, place the terminal punctuation outside the closing quotation mark. When quoting a full sentence, the end of which coincides with the end of the sentence containing it, place terminal punctuation inside the closing quotation mark." Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:07, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

  Ah, I see. Thanks for the fix. I went ahead and did the rest of the quotes as best I understood. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:21, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

• Parra chose París after the city he was educated in Maybe Parra chose París after the city where he was educated

  That works. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

Political career

• Parra and Las Galán assumed a critical position in relation to the way in which the event's organizers had been operating until then Reword this clunker

  Yes, indeed. Shortenned. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

• apply move overtly "More"?

  Right! I swear I proof read these... Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

• LGBT affirming language hyphenate

  Check! Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

References

• Reference [2] is a Blogspot blog. It is very heavily cited, though it is an interview with the subject. There is at least one citation of it for something that is not a quote, which I would avoid.

  I grappled with this one when writing this article because I knew it would surely come up on review but it also contains some of the only personal information I could find on Parra. Blogspot blogs are common even among established print publications in Bolivia but I understand they're not ideal and come with the inherent need to affirm their reliability on Wikipedia. In this case, the exact article is cited on at least one reliable journal published by an academic source, so I elected to trust its authenticity. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

• Earwig mostly catches one or two work titles.

Spot checks

• 9 (Aruquipa 2016, p. 454): Cuando me acerqué a las Galan, hacia el año 1998, compartí muchas conversas con París que era mucho más atrevida y dispuesta a otras búsquedas. Juntas revisamos propuestas transformistas y finalmente adoptamos un transformismo drag queen, que es un transformismo creativo y exagerado (fig. 1). Nuestra apariencia la llevamos al extremo, dándole una connotación lúdica y transgresora, pelucas de colores, trajes estridentes. ... ¡Fue un éxito total! Checks for the three preceding quotes and the success mention. Y
• 16 (Aruquipa, Estenssoro & Vargas 2012, p. 233): Cannot access.
• 19 (Defensoría del Pueblo 2009 p. 70): En esa gestión se logró presentar un anteproyecto de Ley al Parlamento, que hablaba desde el trabajo de derechos y deberes del ciudadano con diferente o diversa orientación sexual alterna a la heterosexual, hasta el matrimonio o unión de personas GLBT. Y
• 21 (ibid. p. 71): Las otras voces que empezaron a surgir como la familia Galán o Mujeres Creando, que no estaban de acuerdo con el anteproyecto, pese a que participaron en la elaboración del documento, se perdió la fuerza y la continuidad, quedando en los archivos del Parlamento y no se pudo hacer nada más
• 42 (La Razón): In La Paz, Las minorías de un solo asambleísta cada una son Sol.bo y el MTS. Y

Images

• Three photos from the Asamblea Legislativa, all CC-BY-2.0. No issues. Consider expanding the alt text on image #2 to provide more information on the banner being held; alt text ideally provides the same context available to a sighted person.

  Expanded that alt text. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:03, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

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