Talk:Parachute Industry Association

Latest comment: 11 years ago by 132.3.33.68 in topic Old notes

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This page currently reads more like an advertisement for the PIA. For example, the opening line "The Parachute Industry Association's mission is to advance and promote the growth, development, training, and safety of military, commercial, and sport parachutes." could read more like "The Parachute Industry Association is an organization established to ...." As it stands right now the article is not neutral and reads more like promotional material. 132.3.33.68 (talk) 13:49, 14 January 2013 (UTC)Reply