Talk:Parmelia barrenoae/GA1

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 15:10, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Nice to see a lichen, reading now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:10, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• Characteristics of the thallus surface include tiny pores for gas exchange, and vegetative propagules called soralia. – When I read "Characteristics" I expect such that are characteristic for the species, i.e. distinguishing features. Are these?

• They could be, depending on whether one is distinguishing between species in other similar genera or between other similar species in the genus, but I switched "Characteristics" for "Features" to hopefully reduce potential confusion. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• P. barrenoae – Sometimes you abbreviate the genus but sometimes not. This has confused me as a reader (thinking that, at the next instance where it was not abbreviated, that a separate genus is introduced). Consistency is key. I personally think we have enough space to always spell these names out, but your call.

• I've spelled out all instances in the lead, and for the "Similar species" section, started out with a general sentence to alert the reader that it is genus Parmelia in the following discussion. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Image: "Parmelia submontana and P. sulcata are lookalikes" – Which is which?

• Now specified. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• covered with small pits and depressions – pits and depressions, isn't that the same?

• Having now consulted a dictionary, I agree. Trimmed. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• the central areas of the margins – "or"?

• Correct, fixed. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Of this, the cortex is 25–37.5 µm thick, the photobiont layer, about 30–40 μm thick, the medulla 120–200 μm thick, and the underlying darkened cortex 25–40 μm thick. – Needs reformulation.

• I removed the extraneous comma after "the photobiont layer" ... does it read ok now? Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• photobiont layer – link or explain?

• I moved a later link up to here. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• The marginal pseudocyphellae are more or less continuous, – are you talking about their distribution pattern on the thallus? Evenly distributed?

• Yes; changed to your suggested wording. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• and the soredia are granular. – what are "soredia"?

• Both soredia and soralia are now linked and parenthetically defined. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Rhizines on the black lower surface are moderately abundant. – lower surface of the thallus? That this is black seems significant, maybe worth to mention earlier and not just here as a side-note?

• Done. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• The photobiont partner of the lichen is a green alga from the genus Trebouxia.[2] – can these be various species, or is it a single species that is unidentified?

• The latter; now mentioned. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Parmelia barrenoae could also be confused with P. submontana, … – source? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• Oops - added. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• salazinic acid – link?

• Already linked in the section right above. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Parmelia barrenoae has been proposed for use as an indicator of well conserved and sustainably managed forests. – Because of its sensitivity to pollutants mentioned in the next sentence? Then, it would make sense to swap these two sentences maybe?

• Sure, done. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

A highly technical topic, but you did an excellent job explaining everything in a way that even I could follow almost completely (everything I didn't fully understand is marked above). I also like the "Similar species" section, very useful. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:06, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• I'm grateful for your helpful review Jens. I've responded to your comments above, and here's a diff showing the changes made. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

• Thanks for the fixes, looks really good! And congrats for the GA :) --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:09, 8 January 2022 (UTC)