Talk:Parnell Dickinson/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Will review shortly. Albacore (talk) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
Comments:
  • In his first three seasons, he led the Southwestern Athletic Conference in total offense. I don't understand; what's "total offense"; total points? most yards gained?
  • After retiring from football, Dickinson became an insurance salesman and opened up two daycare centers. perhaps "up" should be removed here.
  • = sign in ref 23; is that supposed to be there?
  • In that game, Dickinson again came into the game, rushing three times... perhaps link rushing to Rush (gridiron football)#Offense
  • Dickinson returned two weeks later, failing to complete a pass for the Denver Broncos... might want to reword here, current wording might lead to some confusion (for the Denver Broncos led me to imply he was playing for them)
  • In the infobox, TDs-INTs should be TDs–INTs, and likewise 1-5 should be 1–5.

I'll be happy to pass this as a GA after these minor issues are taken care of. Albacore (talk) 15:57, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Fixed. Total offense is basically rushing and passing yards combined, found a link for that. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:21, 5 September 2011 (UTC)Reply