Talk:Patric Walker/GA1

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:38, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

Can review . Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:38, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• The Daily Mail is deprecated, suggest removing/replacing. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 14:30, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

I've explained in the ref why I've used it for one fact which is about the Daily Mail itself

Sure, makes sense. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 18:28, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

• Hi @Eddie891: - any further comments? Cavie78 (talk) 13:18, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

  Yes, hopefully within the next few days. If you can't wait let me know and I'll withdraw from reviewing. Cheers, Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 13:23, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

  Not a problem, just checking :) Cavie78 (talk) 16:34, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

• No Images, so licencing is obviously fine
• The archive link you give for cite # 1 (the independent obituary) is to an article titled "Bookmarked: Hyde Park set for its 15th Unity Day"

Doh! Fixed Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• The NYTimes obit doesn't seem to mention that his parents were British Catholic?

Could've sworn it did. Huh. I can't find any reliable sources for the Catholic bit so have removed Cavie78 (talk) 19:11, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• " the latter after being gifted winnings his aunt made on a sweepstake" AFAIK latter can only be used when two things are mentioned (google clarifies by saying "denoting the second or second mentioned of two people or things.")

Changed Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• do you have the approximate time of this dinner party?

AP says 1958, Independent says 1960. Have added Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• what is a " glossy women's magazine"? That means nothing to me

Is it the "glossy" you don't understand? It's a common term in the UK and refers to the glossy paper used by more upmarket magazines such as Cosmopolitan and Vogue. See for instance: https://www.theguardian.com/media/2016/nov/17/glamour-magazine-scraps-handbag-size-after-15-years Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

Huh, never heard that before. That's fine then Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 16:36, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• in 1976, to Associated Press, for whom he wrote columns" source says he moved to "associated newspapers" is that the same thing?

Doh! Too many associated things - have corrected Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• ", with the release of each supplement raising the paper's circulation by a quarter of a million copies," what does this mean? did it permanently raise the circulation every time, or was it more like "the paper sold a quarter of a million extra copies each time the supplement came out"?

The latter. Have clarified Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• "He was reported to have earned £500,000 for his Evening Standard column" not seeing this in the source?

The source says "Patric Walker, the late doyen of Fleet Street astrology, is believed to have earned well over half a million pounds for his Evening Standard column, long before the days of phone lines." Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• "Walker acted as a mentor to Shelley von Strunckel, who, in December 1995, took over the astrology column in his old newspaper, the Evening Standard having previously covered for Walker when he fell ill in 1991." are you trying to say "Walker acted as a mentor to Shelley von Strunckel, who covered for Walker when he fell ill in 1991 and took over the astrology column in Walker's old newspaper, the Evening Standard, in December 1995"? It isn't quite clear to me

They both read the same to me, but I've changed to your wording Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• The sentence beginning "He has also been described" would benefit from attribution of the quotes, imo

Have added Cavie78 (talk) 19:16, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• and was not survived by any children" was not survived by children or didn't have any?

That's all I have - NYT just says "He had no survivors" Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

• Consider adding a fair use image?

The only images I can find are Getty images (which as far as I know aren't allowed) or one really poor b&w image from a newspaper Cavie78 (talk) 19:04, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

Overall, very nice work and its clear this is close to GA. Holding. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 15:36, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

I think that's all done. Let me know if there are any other issues Cavie78 (talk) 19:16, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

Meets the GA criteria now. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 00:41, 1 February 2021 (UTC) :