Talk:Patricia Bullrich/GA1
Latest comment: 20 hours ago by The Blue Rider in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Nominator: Cambalachero (talk · contribs) 18:25, 14 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 19:09, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
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Stability
edit- Last edit on 24th of October, it was a revert but didn't result in a edit war.
Images
edit- All images are relevant, correctly tagged with the copyright status and have good captions.
Copyvio
edit- Earwig's Copyvio Detector points to 29.1% mainly due to a quotation.
Early life
edit- Though not mandatory for a GA, consider linking Pueyrredón family.
- The sentence Although it was a wealthy family, Alejandro and Julieta divorced.... needs some clarification, for example, why are they no longer wealthy family after divorce? Both Alejandro and Julieta come from wealthy families. Did the mother got the custody of Bullrich? Is that why she had to adjust to a simpler lifestyle? When did they get divorced, that is, how old was Bullrich?
- Add some words on what is Peronist Youth.
- If she abandoned a potential career in field hockey then she must have been a good player. Are there no sources about her field hockey years?
- Decapitalize the "r" in "Argentinian Rock".
- She introduced Fabiana Cantilo to Argentinian rock and it seems like she partially became a rock singer. You should state in direct words that her introduction of rock to her cousin had a direct impact on her musical carreer.
Peronist Youth years
edit- Add wikilink to Honorio Pueyrredon (optional).
- What are the ideas of UCR? That should be made explicit.
- ...when Perón, by then once again president... → ...when Perón, who had once again became president...
- Who are the Montoneros and why were they expelled? That should be made explicit.
- ...the armed conflict... → ...an armed conflict....
- Why did the conflict worsened?
- If she rejoined Columna Norte then there should be a couple of words saying that she left for whatever reason.
- In the sentence Patricia Bullrich had to be on the scene... it should be made more clear what exactly was her role on the attack.
- Add a comma at the end of 1997 in In January 1997.
- The device worked... → The device exploded, injuring the mayor’s daughter, Ana María Noguer, and his daughter-in-law, Hortensia M. de Nogue...
- The fact that she has a partner is casually dropped by stating they exiled together. If available a sentence should be added that she has a partner, Marcelo Langieri, and wherever they met.
- Why did she go to exile?!
Political career
edit- She disagreed with Dante Gullo on what exactly? Why was there a need to reorganize the JP in the first instance?
- Peronism lost the election? Isn't peronism an ideology or are you talking about the Justicialist Party here? I assume the latter, so you should make that clear. Ditto, on the next sentence.
- Elected deputy for which party? A clarification is needed.
- You give examples of bills she proposed, why those three and not other three? None seem to be notable so I don't understand the inclusion of those three.
- She had conflicts... → She had disagreements...
- Clarify that she left the party over the disagreements by adding a conjunction, "so" for example.
- ...to join the... → ...joining...
- Add a interlanguage link to the Spanish article on Unión por la Libertad (optional).
- Add a comma after "then" in Since then.
- Clarify on what is a community policing project?
- Did the merge had a direct relation on the election of Fernando de la Rúa for presidency? If so, why or how?