Talk:Patrick Agyemang

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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Patrick Agyemang/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 12:05, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll take on this review, as part of the July 2021 Backlog Drive.--Harper J. Cole (talk) 12:05, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • [is a former professional footballer] "...is a Ghanaian former professional footballer..."
  • [He was loaned out for a second time in January 2012, this time joining Stevenage on loan until the end of the 2011–12 season.] You don't need to say "on loan", having established it was a loan deal earlier in the sentence
  • [although briefly played for Baffins Milton Rovers and Cray Valley Paper Mills in non-League] --> "although he briefly played for non-League Baffins Milton Rovers and Cray Valley Paper Mills"

Gillingham

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  • [two weeks later – scoring the only goal] Comma instead of a hyphen here.

Preston North End

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  • [both of Preston's play-off games – with Preston losing by] Comma instead of hyphen.
  • [with Preston narrowly missing out on the play-offs positions by a point] No need for "narrowly" as you say they missed out by a point, conveying the same meaning.

Queens Park Rangers

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  • [After struggling for first-team appearances at QPR] Repetition from the previous sentence.
  • [He returned to the QPR team] --> "He returned to QPR"

Stevenage

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  • [in August 20212] Typo in year.

Portsmouth

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  • [as they ended a run of 23-games without a win] No hyphen here; "a 23-game run" would use the hyphen, as it would come before a noun.

International career

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  • [Despite impressing in the friendly,] The cited source doesn't seem to say that he impressed - it does note his height as a possible positive.

Summary

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Hi @Harper J. Cole:. Thanks for taking the time out to review the article. I have made all of the suggested changes. You're correct about the cited source re: friendly, so I have added a line about Agyemang's physical presence in the match instead. SBFCEdit (talk) 21:59, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Looking good! I'll promote to GA status. Thanks for the interesting read,--Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:05, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply