Talk:Paul Henderson/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Resolute in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 20:27, 22 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Passing it. Here are a few nitpicks:

  • "pee-wee tournament" - is it jargon, or teenage slang, or something totally different? Perhaps reword or link it.
    It is the name of an age level of minor hockey, which I have now linked to
  • "history and physical education teacher" - highschool, college, university?
    Sources don't say. Only that he thought of quitting hockey to become a teacher.
  • I am not sure if you need to put a comma after "however" in ", however the Detroit Red Wings". I think there should be a semicolon ahead this word and a comma after it.
    Reworded slightly
  • " when they completed one of the biggest trades in league history to that time on March 3, 1968.[26]" - do you know the sum?
    It was a six-player trade, however quantifying these deals is always tough, as the "size" of a trade is often not just the number of players, but the quality of them too. I've noted it was a six player trade, regardless.
  • "He also suffered torn chest muscles" - I added "from", correct me if I am wrong--Tomcat (7) 12:30, 24 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
    That should be fine. Thanks for the review, I appreciate it! Resolute 14:56, 24 November 2012 (UTC)Reply