Talk:Pavel Buchnevich

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Nova Chrysalia in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 23:50, 15 January 2022 (UTC)Reply


Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 23:50, 15 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

  • I haven't looked at the rest of the article, but the lead seems a bit short.   Done

Will look in detail tomorrow. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 05:44, 25 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

So I lied and it wasn't January 26, but I got more of it done.

  • "his father Andrey worked at a steel factory and now coaches youth soccer" Would it fit the rest of the sentence more by saying he is a youth soccer coach and former steel factory worker?   Done
  • Watch out for editorials and puffery (i.e. breakthrough).
  • How did Buchnevich do with SKA Saint Petersburg?   Done
  • His final season in Russia was 2015, right?
  • He spent quite a few years on Severstal's reserve/youth team, that part of his career should be mentioned.  Done
  • "However, Buchnevich missed significant time during his rookie season with back spasms, including a stretch of nearly two months from November 2016 to January 2017." Doesn't seem to be supported by the reference, which only states he was being assigned to Hartford.   Done
  • "Buchnevich finished the season with 1.77 points per 60 minutes of 5-on-5 play and 1.75 primary assists per 60 to be listed amongst the best Rangers forwards in regards to generating shot attempts." Might be needing some punctuation in between.   Done
  • Corsi For % should be written out on the first mention.   Done
  • How did he do in the IIHF World Championships?   Done
  • Pictures would be nice but obviously optional.
    • It sucks but I got one  

That should be it. Nova Chrysalia (Talk) 18:59, 2 February 2022 (UTC)Reply