Talk:Pavor Nocturnus (Sanctuary)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:32, 20 January 2011 (UTC)

Seeing as how this has waited almost three months, I'll give this article a review. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:32, 20 January 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found with the article:

• I'm a bit confused why Helen Magnus is mention by last name, but Will Zimmerman is mentioned by his first; names should be consistent, preferably last, in articles.

• I called them Magnus and Will because that is how they refer to each other; most characters in the series refer to Helen Magnus as Magnus, while most characters refer to Will Zimmerman as Will. However, in this case I have changed all Wills to Zimmerman. -- Matthew RD 18:47, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

• "Since Syfy allowed the season to take the characters "out for a big spin," introduce a "cool story" and then fuse the characters into it." fragment as is; since could be removed to fix

• Removed that statement. -- Matthew RD 18:47, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

• "In the end it took Kindler and Thorpe seven days to write the episode; a relatively " should be comma instead of semicolon
• "Kindler did not want to include those scenes in again" huh? confusing as worded; also, do you mean include them in future airings/the dvd/the episode itself?
• "Also because of it, and the inclusion" 'Because of this' would make the sentence sound better.
• "One of the sets include" included
• "then later create" created
• "placing Sanctuary the sixth most seen series" 'making' would be better word choice here

I'll put the article on hold and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:01, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

OK, I have now sorted out all the issues you have posted. -- Matthew RD 18:47, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:12, 23 January 2011 (UTC)