Talk:Pe-o margine de lume/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 13:29, 24 June 2018 (UTC)

Infobox

• Remove wikilink from ballad.

Lead

• is a song recorded by → remove recorded
• "An operatic ballad performed in both Romanian and Italian language, the track was likened to the works of Italian singer Andrea Bocelli by music critics."→ The operatic ballad performed in Romanian and Italian language was likened to the works of Italian singer Andrea Bocelli by music critics.
• In Belgrade, Romania qualified → In Belgrade, the track was qualified

 Not done The track represented Romania, so it would be partially wrong to say that "the track" qualified. I think this should remain as it stands right now. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:38, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

You are right. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:40, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

• and by the release of an accompanying music video. Shot by Petre Năstase, it portrays Nico and Vlad at a beach and an abandoned stone pit. → and by the release of an accompanying music video, shot by Petre Năstase, portraying Nico and Vlad at a beach and in an abandoned stone pit.
• and 2009 → and at the 2009

Background and composition

• "to just fit my feelings" → matching her feelings.
• Remove wikilink from ballad.

Reception and controversy

• The song was also well-received → remove also
• It also won a → same as previous

Promotion

• Change the section name to "Music video and promotion"
• and an abandoned → and in an abandoned
• "It partially interferred with the latter's nose operation" → I mean...cool fact, but what is the relevance to this? Plus it is spelled "interfered".

National selection

• 9 February and 16 February → 9 and 16 February
• The singers' → Their
• Further controversy was sparked when TVR was accused of conspiracy, and it was also → Further controversy was sparked when TVR was accused of conspiracy. It was also

In Belgrade

• 20 May and 22 May... → 20 and 22 of May, respectively,...

Points awarded to Romania

• Why is this a sub-section of a sub-section?

The info about the points received by Romania in the contest is kind of an extra topic, and merging it into the "In Belgrade" section would not be the best thing to do, as we would be jumping from one thing to another. I have used this format in several of my articles. I can change it if you want it, though. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:42, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

Let it be, then. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:33, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

Track listing

• Use {{spaced ndash}}.

Release history

• Why not only CD?

The CD also contains the song's music video, making it an enhanced CD, as it does not solely feature audio data. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:43, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

Ok. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:32, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

References

• Fine.

Overall

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Hi there! I don't mean to be rude, but it's been some days since you last edited the review and I was concerned that you may have forgotten about it. Just ignore this message if you haven't. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:20, 28 June 2018 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: I haven't hopefully, I will edit a bit more today. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:34, 28 June 2018 (UTC)

• Please address the issues I raised. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:54, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Hi there and thank you very much for your review!! I have solved all your queries apart from those I've commented on. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:44, 30 June 2018 (UTC)

I will give it a second look and see if it needs further fixes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:40, 30 June 2018 (UTC)