Talk:People Move On/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Ippantekina in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)Reply


Will review this within a week-- Ippantekina (talk) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Lead

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  • "before starting his solo career" was he part of a band/project before?
McAlmont & Butler – mentioned earlier in the sentence. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Background

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  • "produced Hopper's sole album" do you mean solo?
Sole – their only album. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • ", and contemplated what to do with his life, and decided to start a solo career" the first "and" is redundant
  • Link demo

Writing and production

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  • "would like to collaborate Ashcroft" collaborate with
  • The wikilink to Makoto Sakamoto is an article about a Japanese athlete. Do you think the wikilink is correct?
  • Link mixing
  • Link mastering

Composition and lyrics

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  • "compared to the work of Jeff Buckley, Young, and Wilco" is "Young" here Neil Young?
  • "Drawing influences from classic rock from the late 1960s and 1970s, Lucy O'Brien of The Independent wrote" grammar
  • "Though Butler has stressed that it isn't a "retro record".[25]" grammar
  • Link jargon terms like crescendo and coda

Critical reception

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I've linked it in the Reissues section instead. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Reception

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  • The Birmingham Post quote is too long; consider trimming it down

Sources

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  • There are a lot of harv errors in the sources ("Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation"). Install this script and fix accordingly.
I haven't used the harv template/parameter so I'm not sure why the warning would be coming up at all? MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
I suggest using {{sfn}}. Very useful in guiding which source the ref points to, too. Ippantekina (talk) 08:42, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
Added. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
Superb. No more harv erros. Ippantekina (talk) 09:01, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Overall

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@Ippantekina: Made most of the changes, but see above for comments. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
@MusicforthePeople: Thank you for addressing the comments. I have one remaining issue with refs/harv. Ippantekina (talk) 08:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Ippantekina: Done. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply
Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 09:02, 22 August 2022 (UTC)Reply