Talk:Per-Åke Theander

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Boeing720 in topic Section and Copy Editing

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...deals with ONE issue, Per-Åke Theander as footballer. Multiple issues ??? Some of his team mates called him "the Basil Fawlty of his club". This is not a second subject. John Cleese and Fawlty Towers was enormously popular during his time as player. Nothing ackward with that. Boeing720 (talk) 03:11, 18 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

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@Boeing720: First of all, both tags are placed to improve article. By no means, they are put to undermine your and others effort to write and improve this article. You can review copy editing and sections, and try to write according to guidelines. Once issues are fixed, you can remove both tags. Putting tags draw attention of users who like to improve articles. So, putting tags will help improve this article not the other way around. Having tags are not bad thing. I would suggest you to put tags back. One example where improvement is required is first paragraph, which says " ... He was an own product of Landskrona BoIS, a club he became faithful to throughout his entire career". In my opinion we can re-write and make it more clear. Also, having sections improve reading of an article. I hope, I have clarified reason for putting tags.--Spasage (talk) 14:40, 18 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

"own product" - he began as a kid in the club, "edjucated in the club". He never represented any other club either. (both with sources) The tag was about "multiple issues". That can I not really see. Thanks. Boeing720 (talk) 23:38, 18 January 2018 (UTC)Reply