Talk:Pershing Square Building/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:43, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• " Grand Union Hotel.[3] Construction..." just a solitary ref in the lead, probably could be removed as long as the material is noted and referenced in the main body.
  • Removed.
• " in 2010. In 2016" vaguely clunky.
  • Fixed.
• "the Dual Contracts was" were?
  • Fixed.
• " cost $3.5 million, then a very high sum.[" consider inflation so we don't need "then a very high sum". And consider inflation on the other contemporaneous values.
  • Fixed.
• "The 25-story building's site. and " rogue period.
  • Fixed.
• " investor Henry Mandel[a] offered " awkward red link/note combo somewhat detracts from the fine prose.
  • Removed the red link. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
• "accepted.[23]<[24]" rogue <.
  • Fixed.
• "Pershing Square Building Corp. " with or without period? Be consistent.
  • I went with spelling out the name fully. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
• Continental Can Building could be a reasonable redirect to create since you have it in bold.
  • Done.
• "The current owner..." -> "As of 2020 the owner is..."
  • Done.
• "110 East 42nd Street" has been linked a couple of times already before you get to the third link in the Description section.
  • I removed this duplicate link. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
• "peace.[47][35]" while you're editing, could you order these?
  • Done.
• Could link Vanderbilt Avenue (in the caption).
  • Done.
• " is a 24-story office " vs "who took up the 24th and 25th floors"?
  • Fixed. It is 25 stories but the 25th story is not a full-lot penthouse. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
• Check consistency in refs, e.g. ref 37 has a URL and a publication date but no accessdate, unlike the others.
  • I have fixed these. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

The article is excellent and it's hard to find fault. It's certainly GA quality but could we just address these issues before I promote? Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the comments. I have fixed them all. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Good work, definitely happy with that so promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:15, 1 April 2020 (UTC)