Talk:Pete Docter/GA1

GA Review

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Hello, I am Majorly and I'll be reviewing this article.

It's looking good at a glance. Some points to work on:

• In the lead, it says "key figure and collaborator in Pixar Animation Studios for the past twenty years". This is obviously going to change, so I'd consider reworking that or leaving it out altogether.
• Per WP:LEAD, it needs expansion, to cover all aspects of the article, and not introduce new facts.
• "his sister, Kirsten Doctor"... should not be Docter?

Saving for now, but I'll be back later to finish. Majorly talk 18:21, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

• "Nick and Elie (Nicholas and Elizabeth), ages 12 and 10 as of 2009" Again, this will change, why not leave this unimportant information off? It then goes on... "He can play several music instruments. Elie has a speaking part in Up as Young Ellie." Is the he referring to Nicholas or Pete? It should probably removed either way.

• Pixar filmography - why not a full filmography?

• Nitpick - please format the references consistently. The dates, for example, should all be the same.

• The main image is a blurry out of focus shot. Why not use the other image as the main one?

Once these points are fixed, I'll check it over against the criteria. Majorly talk 00:06, 29 August 2009 (UTC)

Is the article 'on hold' now? The Squicks (talk) 06:09, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

Pretty much. Majorly talk 13:36, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

No response for over a week, I've had no choice but to fail this. Please renominate it when you have fixed these issues. It should have no problem passing. Ping me on my talk page if you do, I'll be happy to review it. Majorly talk 13:15, 9 September 2009 (UTC)