Talk:Peter Badcoe/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by AustralianRupert in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 11:10, 25 May 2019 (UTC)
I will review this article for GAN. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 11:10, 25 May 2019 (UTC)
Initial comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 00:39, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- VC/Victoria Cross is linked twice in the lead, but I can see the usefulness of doing this (no action required)
- in the lead, I suggest maybe starting a new paragraph at "In 2008, his medal set..."
- do we know what posting or role he had between 1950 and 1952?
- It's not clear in the sources. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- From memory there is some mention of service in one of the National Service Battalions before Portsea, in They Dared Mightily. I don't have access to it to check at the moment, though. Possibly it was the 16th per this: [1]. Probably worth a mention. Is the service record available through the NAA? If so, it would probably clear things up further. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 06:11, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- G'day, I managed to get a look at They Dared Mightily at the work library, so I have added this for you now. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:33, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
- Despite his father's opposition: do we know what is objection was?
- Not in sources. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- No worries. AustralianRupert (talk) 06:11, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- changed his surname to Badcoe: do we know why?
- Not in sources. But I can imagine. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- No worries, the obvious reason is probably the most likely, I suppose. AustralianRupert (talk) 06:11, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- served a tour with them in the Federation of Malaya: perhaps explain why they deployed to Malaya at that time?
- Good idea. Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- in the body it says his observation tour in Vietnam was November 1962, but the lead implies it was 1961
- I've changed to to 1962 in the lead, as it isn't clear what the dates of his Malaya trip were. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- led an frontal assault --> "led a frontal assault"
- Captain Clement and Sergeant Thomas: do we know their first names?
- Only Thomas, so I thought I'd leave them both as surname only. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- Dodging through automatic fire --> "Dodging automatic fire"
- Badcoe was travelling in a vehicle with his deputy and another US officer, when it veered off the road into a ditch and Badcoe's deputy was killed. Badcoe left the vehicle.. --> "Badcoe was travelling in a vehicle with his deputy and another US officer, when it veered off the road into a ditch. Badcoe's deputy was killed and he left the vehicle..."
- garrison of the district headquarters were saved --> "was saved"?
- He was a "veritable tiger" in combat: suggest attributing this in text
- headquarters duty officer that due: the word "that" seems out of place here
- Yes, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:54, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- straight for an enemy machine position: missing word "machine gun"
- in the Vietnam War section, Viet Cong is overlinked
- "File:Peter Badcoe c.1950's P00942.002.JPG": suggest adjusting the date on the description page from "1950s" to "c. 1954" per the source: [2]. Additionally, it could probably take the PD-AustraliaGov licence
- Done on both counts. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:13, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- ext links work (no action required)
- there are no dabs (no action required)
- sources all appear to be reliable and all information appears to be referenced (no action required)
- capitalisation: "Victoria Cross: Australia's Finest and the Battles they Fought" --> "Victoria Cross: Australia's Finest and the Battles They Fought"?
- in the Websites and gazettes section, "Sydney Morning Herald" --> italics?
- in the Vietnam War section or the later part of the Early life section, an extra image in the first part of the section would help break up the text a little better (suggestion only). For instance, this image might work: [3] or this one [4]
- Most remiss of me. Have added one of him, as suggested, and one of RF soldiers. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:39, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- The operation concluded successfully.[11][5][12]: suggest ordering the refs numerically
- of the district headquarters.[13][5][14]: same as above
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- I reckon I'm done here, AR. Here are my edits. Thanks for looking at this so promptly, and for all your helpful comments. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:39, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
- Changes look good. Passing now. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:33, 28 May 2019 (UTC)
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