Talk:Peter van Geersdaele

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:49, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Comments looks like this was hanging around for too long, and it's a subject close to my upbringing, so here we go...

• " the Sutton Hoo ship-burial." this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE.

• I agree it's not ideal, but the "Sutton Hoo ship-burial" is the standard name, and both links are relevant. This is the way it's linked in many articles that mention it.

• It's similar in the infobox (although it looks like you've piped "ship-burial" differently from the way you do it in the lead).

• Added a pipe.

• Could we put a "(pictured in 2018)" in that caption? Or are we not clear when the photo was taken?

• I don't know when it was taken. I've been meaning to send an email to his daughter, however, so will ask when I do so (she was the one who sent it to me).

• General structure: I think three paras in the lead is too long for an article of this size, perhaps two (see WP:LEAD for MOS guidance).

• Now only two paragraphs.

• I think the article has strong UK ties, so we should go with "fibreglass" really.

• Done.

• Again, per TIES, I would expect the British Museum to have referred to "Medieval" as "Mediaeval" (or even "Mediæval"), could you just double-check that?

• The article which is the source for that says Authors' address: Department of Medieval and Later Antiquities, British Museum, London WC1B 3DG, Great Britain. Happy to change it if we find a better source that says otherwise, though.

• "Early life and education" not sure much of this is about "education" to be honest...

• It's a bit of a convention in the articles I've worked on (e.g., Nigel Williams (conservator) and Caroline Brady (philologist)), but there is at least a bit of education in this section school and Hammersmith Technical College, and his work at the Victoria and Albert Museum during that time).

• "and tried out with" would this be "had a trial with"? We don't really "try out" with football clubs in the UK.

• Done.

• "1954 to 1976 Peter van Geersdaele worked " no need to repeat his first name.

• Removed.

• "a process he replicated in October 1970 " perhaps could we use a different word from "replicated" as we're talking about "replicas" already...?

• Done: a process he repeated in October 1970

• "Anglo-Saxon Sutton Hoo ship-burial, " this is a triple-whammy SEAOFBLUE.

• Moved Anglo-Saxon to the next sentence.

• "two and a half decades " why not simply 26 years?

• Done.

• "fiberglass replica.[17][18]" you link "fiberglass" at this point...? (and apply the ENGVAR I'm recommending too if you agree).

• Moved the link to the first mention, and changed the spelling.

• " an estimated 6,100 kg (13,400 lb)" picky, but in 1970, did van Geersdaele really write about how much it weighed in kg first?

• Yep: "It measures 23•8 in length and 4•3 m at its widest point amidships, and the estimated weight was approximately 6100 kg (Fig. 1)."

• " twenty-five sections." 25 (you previously mentioned 85 sections, so consistent approach).

• Done.

• "in 1955,[1][34][1]" so good you ref'd [1] twice!

• Hah! Removed.

• I think instead of Woodbridge, Suffolk, we would normally just go with Woodbridge, Suffolk.

• Not a big deal, but I generally try to add the extra link.

• Council Tax is a formal thing, so you can capitalise it (and maybe link it).

• Done.

That's it for a quick pass, it's a nice neat article. I'll put the GAN on hold while we go through these minor issues. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:27, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Many thanks for the review, The Rambling Man, and sorry for not responding earlier. I think I've responded to all your points above. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:02, 2 September 2019 (UTC)

No worries, happy with your updates and responses above, some of the points I raise aren't covered by the GA criteria anyway, so I'm happy to promote. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:14, 2 September 2019 (UTC)

"NOTE :One member of the team , Graham Adamson , was still alive as at 07/10/19"

Hi Sillyoldwizard, thanks for your addition to this article regarding Graham Adamson. It's particularly helpful, since I hadn't been able to find his first name before, for the following sentence: "Van Geersdaele led the operation, with help from Jack Langhorn, Senior Technician at the British Museum's plasterers' shop, A. Prescott, Nigel Williams, G. Adamsom, Y. Crossman, and G. Joysmith." Could you please share your source for the fact that he is still alive, so it can be properly incorporated into the article? Thanks, --Usernameunique (talk) 15:16, 7 October 2019 (UTC)