Talk:Pies Descalzos/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WonderBoy1998 (talk · contribs) 18:36, 12 August 2013 (UTC)

Hello-hello! I'm here to conduct the review for this album. Hope it doesn't take long! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:36, 12 August 2013 (UTC)

Files

• All have fair use-rationales. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 14:22, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "The album additionally peaked at numbers 3 and 5 "- Make "3 and 5"→ "three and five" (Wikipedia:ORDINAL). --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 14:22, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

 Done

Bg and Compo

• Made minor changes myself
• "Consequentially, Shakira took a two-year hiatus, allowing her to complete her high school education."- reference needed.

 Done

• "her first official studio album Pies Descalzos in 1996 by Sony Music and Columbia Records."- Were the first two not official? Clarify this.

 Done

• I think the publisher parameter of MetroLyrics will contain CBS Interactive.

 Done

• I would suggest adding the English translations of the song names in brackets. Like "Pienso en Ti" ("I Think of You").

 Done

• "asks for the return of a departed boyfriend, who cannot see herself without."- What?

 Done

• Do you not think the coverage of this section could be improved and incorporate more about the composition of individual songs? Like it is done in the articles Flashback (Ivy Queen album), She Wolf, and Fever (Kylie Minogue album). This will even help the article in case you try to do it for FAC.

 Half done, since the entire album is made up of guitar-driven tracks, I was concerned I might become redundant if I mentioned that for each track. That being said, I did make note of tracks that have unique instruments of work with other genres, what do you think?

Fine by me! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 15:58, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

Singles

• " it served as the directorial debut for Simon Brand"- ref says it was the music video debut of Shakira but no mentioning of it being Brand's directorial debut.

 Done

• Use Template:Cite AV media for the YouTube ref. It'd be better if you found a text or non-youtube one. But no worries if you don't!

 Done

• "Shakira at an upper class masquerade ball, an image often used to represent the personas people wear in society. She begins to sing after a door opens, and additionally displays the rules society has created for itself."- A YouTube ref won't work for such commentary. :(
• "who succumb to their sexual desires and become pregnant"- So....they both became pregnant? Lol :P XD

 Done

• Don't you have specific release dates for the singles? --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 17:45, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

I have looked for them in the past, though reputable sources only confirmed the year, and it appears that Wikipedia was one of the only places to list (unsourced) full dates.

You don't need specific dates. Just a year and maybe a month is good enough. Erick (talk) 19:32, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

Reception

• Something is definitely wrong with ref number 39 (The certification ones)

Those Argentinian references always have issues, and since no replacement can be found, I'll have to remove it.

If a website is archived, then you don't have to remove it. See WP:LINKROT#Internet archives Erick (talk) 19:11, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

I did look for an archive before completely removing it. As it turned out, the archive itself was also dead. WikiRedactor (talk) 12:17, 14 August 2013 (UTC)

That's weird. Because it's working perfectly fine for me. Maybe it was just down temporarily? Erick (talk) 12:58, 14 August 2013 (UTC)

• "In her native Colombia, the album was awarded the "Diamond Prism", acknowledging sales of one million units"- In-line Reference?

 Done

• " It was additionally certified platinum in Chile. In Ecuador, Pies Descalzos, sales of 15,000 copies earned the album a platinum certification"- in-line references of these two countries?

 Done

• Unfortunately, the Argentine CAPIF ref doesn't open due to internal site error. Do you have an archive?

Same as above, has to be removed.

• "In Peru, Pies Descalzos attained platinum certification after surpassing 10,000 sold copies. It also was awarded platinum recognition in Venezuela."- In-line ref?

 Done

Rest all is fine. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 17:56, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

Status

On Hold. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 17:56, 13 August 2013 (UTC)

All major concerns (although almost all were minor!) addressed! Passed! Great work! We have another GA Shakira article, hopefully someone takes one of my 3 Shaki nominations and we have more ;) --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 13:05, 14 August 2013 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.