Talk:Pig/GA1

Latest comment: 8 months ago by Wolverine XI in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 12:19, 3 March 2024 (UTC)Reply


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Placing my spot. Wolverine XI (den🐾) 12:19, 3 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Gloucester Old Spot? — Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:26, 3 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Chiswick Chap: Sorry for the 24-hour wait; I had some business to attend to. Starting the review now. Wolverine XI (den🐾) 13:49, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Prose

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  • Change the lead image; I'm seeing half-pigs, full pigs and more pink. With that image, I can't really tell how a pig's body looks like.
    • Done.
  • swine What is this? I've never heard of it. In other words, I don't think that's common
    • 87 million g-hits says otherwise. Usage varies by country. Said "also" rather than "often".
  • when distinguishing from other members of the genus Sus Cut and start a new sentence.
    • Done.
  • It is variously considered This doesn't make sense
    • It does actually, but I've reworded it for you.
  • When these arrived in Europe The problem here is obvious
    • Edited.
  • Mention something about bacon in the lead
    • Added.
  • pig producer A pig is an animal not a product. Are you saying China breeds the most pigs?
    • Edited. Yes.
  • In the male to In males
    • Edited, but both forms are standard English.
  • by constantly being ground against each other. I don't think the grammar is right here
    • Edited.
  • Pigs have a maximum life span of about 27 years. Would make more sense in reproduction.
    • Moved.
  • We are missing body weight, body length, height shoulder, size variation, and size records.
    • Added.
  • in a way similar to the way they are Redundancy
    • Edited.
  • as rural populations focused instead on commodity-producing livestock put instead before focused
    • Done, but both forms are standard English.
  • More recently 2007 was 17 years ago; I remember very little from that year, so it's not recent.
    • Certainly much more recent than the Neolithic, which is what the "more" is saying.
  • Historical records indicate that Asian pigs were again introduced into Europe during the 18th and early 19th centuries. How? What happened? We need to know more.
    • They interbred, what else. I think this is quite sufficient here for a general readership; it's enough to indicate a complex history of introductions and reintroductions.
  • The Neolithic thing should go under History
    • No, domestication was the critical stage, and it was in the Neolithic, a period of prehistory.
  • Escaped pigs became feral, disrupting the lives of Native Americans. How? Did their presence disturb people?
    • Removed the 'disrupting' bit.
  • With a population of around 1 billion individuals, the domesticated pig is one of the most numerous large mammals on the planet. This has nothing to do with the Columbian Exchange
    • Moved to Agriculture.
  • Ref bomb in feral pigs
    • Fixed.
  • For feral pigs, you really need to say how they are disruptive and it needs expansion. The info is vary sparse and does not satisfy the reader.
    • Added.
  • pregnancy to be established. Doesn't sound right
    • Edited, but again it's standard usage.
  • Maternal recognition of pregnancy in pigs So mothers realize they are pregnant? Why is this important?
    • Edited. It's the body not the conscious mind, and the process triggers critical hormonal changes.
  • To avoid luteolysis by PGF2α, rescuing of the corpus luteum must occur via embryonic signaling of estradiol 17β and PGE2. Too technical; a normal reader won't comprehend this.
    • Yeah, simplified.
  • Mention how piglets are farmed and taken from their mothers
  • No, we need a section on intelligence, pigs are way too smart. A single mention won't do it
    • Added.
  • Nest-building, teat order & Nursing should go under reproduction
    • Moved.
  • use is made of this in Europe. Please rephrase
    • Edited.
  • Mention that pigs have a better sense of smell than dogs, and are sometimes used for this purpose. Also, just how strong is a pig's sense of smell?
    • Mentioned and cited in Senses. The scientists are very chary of saying "better than", preferring things they can actually measure.
  • Slaughterhouse, bacon? Come on, I thought bacon was big, at least mention which part is used.
    • Added.
  • Don't farmers cut their tails or something?
    • Added.
  • How many pig breeds are there? At least in the US.
    • Added and cited. Best we stay global not regional. The section does in fact name 3 American breeds already.
  • I'm a Christian and I read somewhere in the Bible that pigs were unclean, explain that please.
    • Mentioned they're forbidden in Judaism, and cited the verse that says so.

More to come. Wolverine XI (den🐾) 14:54, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Sources

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  • Corbet and Hill (1992) needs page nos.
    • Removed.
  • Hughes, Paul (1980) needs page nos.
    • Removed.
  • Gonyou, H. W. (2001) needs page nos.
    • Done.
  • Herron, Alan J. (5 December 2009) Rm the quote, ditto in ref 101
    • Done both.
  • 104 needs date
    • The source does not give a date. The op. was on 25 September 2021 and the access-date is 2 November 2021, so we're pretty close.
  • Valerie Porter (2016) don't spell out page
    • Formatted.

I'm done with the review. Wolverine XI (den🐾) 20:35, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

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