Talk:Pilot (Millennium)/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Grapple X in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 03:27, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
Issues:
- Plot: "hallucinating pouring over a blonde stripper" I assume the word 'blood' is supposed to go in there somewhere
- Plot: "formed of retired" I would say 'from' instead of 'of'. If you want of, used the word 'comprised' instead of 'formed'
- Plot: I would use a different word besides 'spooks'
- Production: Comma after "Ruby Tipm"
- Production: "Millennium received higher viewing figures during its first season that The X-Files had done" 'that' should be 'then'
Those are the only problems I can find. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 16:15, 14 April 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking at this one for me. I think I've addressed everything you've raised here, let me know if there's anything else you think needs seen to. GRAPPLE X 23:14, 14 April 2012 (UTC)