Talk:Pokémon Channel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Buffbills7701 (talk · contribs) 22:14, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

Unreferenced Sentences

• "...a similar digital pet-type game where the player plays with a Pikachu—and promote the Nintendo e-Reader peripheral device."
  • That's in the IGN article. Easy to miss, I guess. Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
    •  Done
• "The game was first announced at Electronic Entertainment Expo (E3) 2003."
  • Also in the IGN article referenced a bit later. Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
    •  Done

Other notes

• "The game was first announced at Electronic Entertainment Expo (E3) 2003." Shouldn't in be added in making it "Electronic Entertainment Expo (E3)in 2003"?
  • It's usually known as "E3 (year)", e.g. "E3 2003". Should I switch it up to "E3 (Electronic Entertainment Expo) 2003"? Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
    • Nope, it's fine. buffbills7701 02:09, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
• "17. Ambrella. Pokémon Channel. "Oak: Oh? What was that cry?"" Should the references just quote parts of the game?
  • As far as I know, that's appropriate for plot sections of game articles; it's a common format. Many GAs' and FAs' plot sections don't cite anything at all. Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
    •  Done buffbills7701 02:09, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
• Why is there a picture of the Pokémon Mini in the section about the development of the game? The section doesn't mention the Mini at all.
  • Yeah, to be honest I kinda just put it there because the paragraphs were short. Would a picture of the e-Reader fit better? Or nothing, and I just find a way to combine them? Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
    • Yeah, the picture of the e-reader would be better. buffbills7701 02:09, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
      • Done. Tezero (talk) 02:49, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
• "...making it the thirteenth best-selling game during the week from July 14 to July 20." WP:FANCRUFT. I'm positive no one cares how good it was during a week.
  • That week is significant, but I can see how that might not have been apparent. (It was the week of the game's release in Japan; I haven't found any more reliable sales information, including from Japan.) Rephrased. Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
  • "During the week from..." is bad grammar. Perhaps "During the week of..." would work better?
    • Fixed during the rephrasing. Tezero (talk) 00:52, 11 February 2014 (UTC)
      •  Done buffbills7701 02:09, 11 February 2014 (UTC)

Verdict

I've decided to put this article on hold for a week. buffbills7701 22:14, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

The article passes. Congrats! buffbills7701 12:09, 11 February 2014 (UTC)