Talk:Pokey Allen/GA2

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Kaiser matias in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 02:03, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply


GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  


Some minor comments:

  • "compiling a career college football record of 87–41–2 (.677)." Add a note to denote what the numbers mean; I'd suggest using <abbr title="A mouseover">
  • Add a note about his cancer to the lead, as it is fairly important to his life. Just a simple sentence like "Allen was diagnosed with cancer in 1994, and coached until shortly before his death until 1996," or something.
  • "Allen became an assistant coach in 1968 at Simon Fraser." Add "University" to the end there to clarify what Simon Fraser is.
  • "he was named co-coach of the team." Who did he co-coach with?
  • "the USFL, a newly formed professional league which played its games in the spring." Add "unlike the NFL, which played in the fall and winter," to clarify why that is important, or even broaden it to include college football as well.
  • The Portland State section should include his coaching record there, as it doesn't mention his overall wins-losses.
  • "Allen had a reputation for publicity stunts;" as it was already noted that Allen did stunts with Portland State, perhaps reword it to "Allen maintained his reputation for publicity stunts while at Boise State."
  • Personal life section: Is there any mention of his wife's name, or anything else?
    • Not that I could find, unfortunately. A coach’s family usually isn’t subject to a lot of press, and I didn’t see anything much about them in what I have access to. I’ll look again tonight just in case I missed anything. ~ Rob13Talk 19:58, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Overall it's good, like it was last time I reviewed it. Just a few things to clear up and then it should be good to go. Kaiser matias (talk) 02:03, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Looking good. Just add the record for Portland State, and I'll give you time to take a look about his family, but I understand if nothing comes up, it won't hurt the promotion. Kaiser matias (talk) 02:17, 7 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
No luck finding any further family stuff, unfortunately. ~ Rob13Talk 08:43, 8 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
Yeah I didn't think there would be. A shame, but it can't be held against the article. Going to pass it then. Kaiser matias (talk) 08:53, 8 January 2018 (UTC)Reply