Talk:Polysubstance dependence/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Muboshgu (talk · contribs) 00:32, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

I am knowledgeable on this topic. I will review it next week. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:32, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

Regrettably, I am quickfailing this article. This article needs some work, but could get to GA status in time. Below is a non-exhaustive list of comments to explain. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:19, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

• This is a classifiable disorder. Why aren't you using {{Infobox disease}}?
• Images need captions
• The lead is a major issue. Please read MOS:LEAD. The page title should be bolded in the first sentence, the lead needs to be expanded and should summarize the article, which it at present does not. It talks about specific studies in a manner that does not summarize all that is known about polysubstance dependence.
  • The first sentence: "A person with polysubstance dependence is psychologically addicted to being in an intoxicated state without a preference to one particular substance" This is an insufficient summarization of the topic.
• What is http://www.minddisorders.com/Ob-Ps/Polysubstance-dependence.html? How is this a reliable source?
• The lead claims that polysubstance dependence only concerns alcohol, cocaine and heroin, based on one study in the literature. Polysubstance dependence can be for any two substances.
• The article discusses the the DSM-IV-TR, which is good. However, there isn't any mention of the ICD, so this article lacks the worldwide perspective.
• Prose is an issue.
  • One example that drew my attention: "There is [sic] data to support that some genes contribute to substance dependence" Why is there a [sic] in a sentence that doesn't include a quotation.
  • Spaces between periods and references, references inside periods, no spaces between words and parentheses...